All Comments on 'Alli'

Nicely composed tale but, I'm not sure that it's in the correct category.

Good start, with room for more. Be interesting to learn more about his son's relationship with his mother, and how he takes the news that his wife is fucking his father.

I liked your tale a lot. The love at first site aspect of the story is well done. As for the son its obvious he is out of the picture and wouldn't give a shit by the way you told the story. Another ch. or two would be nice. It could be about his son and ex wife maybe. Please

have someone proof read your next though.

Editor, please.

Entertaining story, depressing ending.

sorry but I stopped reading at the first lol and ha ha ha ha

I enjoyed the read and I'm glad for the happy ending.

I was of thought that his son Jon would be glad that Alli left him, so he could go back to his mother and revive the sexual love affair they had before he met Alli.

Jon was probably fucking his mother the day after Alli left.

Thanks for the very good read.

It wasn't enough that the writing and grammar was horrible but did she have to call him Daddy like she was some little girl?

I really loved your story. Kudos. There's no more I can say than that. Congrats.

Ali and Jon are daughter-in-law and Father -in- law . not related by blood . ., hence no incest involved. How ever . beautiful story . My cock got hard.

Not incest as not blood related but nice story. I give it 5

i loved it, yeah the daddy bit didn't ring true, just wasn't right. I can't understand why people let bad grammar spoil their enjoyment of a good story. 5* from me. I love an happy ending