All Comments on 'Always Home Ch. 01'

Very compelling reading. Thanks.

You may draw comments from others, such as 'where's the sex?' Well, the most exciting sexual encounters are prefaced with anticipation, nuance, and almost languid development. You could have had the characters in a three-way orgy by now but it would have been just another poorly written sex story. Instead, you are writing a story about love. When the physical encounters do develop, I anticipate they will be meaningful because, by then, we will know something of the characters. Please continue as you have done thus far and I will eagerly await the next installment.

I liked your lead-in and the way you slowly built up your story. It was well planned and well written, showing once again that the more mature writers are usually the best. Thank you for a pleasant but brief interlude from the world.

Granted, this isn't a very action-filled chapter but that doesn't matter. It still got 5 stars because it was very well-written. Definitely looking forward to following this storyline. Nice job!

5 Stars.

Finally a storie with actuall build up and storyline! I LOVE YOU!!!!!!!

This is what writing should be about! Looking forward to continuing this story.

You have done well...just finish it

Because mature readers want build up and don't want sex on every fucking chapter because they aren't disgusting freaks. Good job, not catering to those losers. They should just watch porn.

REAL

But I LOVED the first chapter! It's a testament to your writing ability that my heart aches for these siblings!

Story line good but odd, struggling a bit as no real descriptions or exact ages till much later, and no idea about the 3rd sibling, no time of year or location too.

Lets see what chaper 2 brings eh ?

Of course the will can challenged, this happens often.

They'd beat the floozy too, not a problem in any Western country legal system I know. Would not cost a fortune to do so either. Most countries have lawyers who do no win no pay cases.

This story plot has a huge hole in it already