All Comments on 'Amanda'

A lovely idea for a story and an unusual way to frame up a rather erotic threesome, but your use of the second person (lots of "I"s and "you"s) and the rapid switches between the protagonists' points of view made the flow somewhat difficult to follow at times. (Whose breasts? Which one is watching? Who's turned on? Who's doing what with Simone?)

A careful revision would make this a very good submission... keep up the good work!