Amen Corner

I really don't know where to begin. You're amusing, funny, witty, and erotic. Your references to all sorts of things make this the most interesting of stories. The way they are told I can literally imagine them happening. I was very impressed to have Daniel Q Steele comment on your stories as I admire his work tremendously. Some of your asides have left me rolling on the floor laughing. Thanks again. I would only wish that I had a hundredth of your talent for composition.

Enjoyed reading the story and it was CUTE. Maybe it was a little too cute. The spelling of the authors pen name to start with is cute. The main chatacter was portrayed as being very cute which was a big turn on along with the conjugal act and ALL of the analogies were cute but, they became a little tiring after a while by virtue of the number of them. Many people speak with cute analogies but not everyone uses a cute analogy in every statement that they make. Other than that it was a good cute enjoyable story.

AMEN and Amen

This is the first of your stories that I have read, but it will not be the last, I assure you.

I love your sense of humour. It has a naughty impish feel to it that makes me think you would be a really interesting person to know. I seriously doubt your friends have a boring life when you are around.

The weaving of that humour with this, very erotic tale, makes me really want to believe that you are sharing your own, real life experience here.

Real or not, it certainly felt real.

To be a really good story teller you have to 'involve' your readers in your story. They have to actually care about the characters and their lives.

To say I felt involved is an understatement. I was willing you on from your first meeting with the coach and I wanted to punch that 'sweet feminine' lady who met you at the airport, for you.

To sum up: A really sweet, erotic, funny and touching story. Well done. Every public comment seems to echo my own feelings about this one.

I think you got it right here. Congratulations.

Funny, creative and fresh! Love the pop culture references! Can't remember when i enjoyed a story more.

My earliest experiences were on a golf course but the best I managed was a bit of 'touchy/feely' with only the prospect of a good wank when I got home.

I can only agree with the previous commentators and say how much you got into my soul with your work.

Say again, loved that.

You didn't mince words, but got to the point. Yet you said all that was necessary to portray Alexis and set the inevitable scene that was to be the climax of the story. Wonder how many other coaches recruited her and had a similar audition? Golf courses are amazing playgrounds - they offer many opportunities for those who stroll away from the parties held in the clubhouse. You take me back to my own youth. Thanks!

This is great writing. Great use of figurative language, the story was good start to finish. Have you written anything else?

J

I would love this story to be true. Alexis must be a very fun person to know. Thanks for the tale. JKS

This is the first thing of yours I've read, after stumbling across your Lady Godiva piece in the-I guess - Nude Day contest.By the way, the Godiva piece was a damned clever way of mixing history, nudity and erotica. This story was something else. It was funny, hot and it made me interested for the first time in my life in golf. Which previously I would have passed for the pleasure of watching paint dry. Anyway, you're either one hell of a writer or you are a young woman. That's a way of saying that at least in this story you have what's called a compelling voice. I'd probably read something you wrote about paint drying, if you wrote it in that voice. And that's not talent or craft. You either have a voice that makes people want to read your stuff, or you don't. You do. I'm glad I found your stories and when I come up for air from what I'm doing, I plan on reading the rest of your posts. Thanx