All Comments on 'Amy'

Of course, the daughters grow up twisted, unsure of their sexuality or their place in life. And please don't say the kids won't know. Kids always know.

And Paul is their father?!

Why do people insist upon writing stories where everyone is a sick piece of excrement?

The story would have been fine without dragging kids into it. Maybe.

Loved it.

Very hot. Looking forward to more of your stories

Don't pay attention to the people that are nay-sayers. If they don't want to read stuff with adult content, they should not be reading the stories on literotica.

for getting out of the pattern of writing the same story over and over again. This one was probably your best because of it.

Simple, clean, and fun to read.....What else is there!

because he wants "mommy and her little girl". The guy is just sick. I am suprise Lit published this crap.

Kilroy

You have some beautiful paragraphs in this story.

Pretty sick observation.

I had no idea he was a fucking whack job

When the story first started, I didn't think I'd like it,but the author made the storyline unusual enough to tweak my interest.

A very erotic theme as to where the tall sexy bitch owned both her and her husband.

It would be a win win situation for Paul, as long as he didn't wear out from both women fucking him half to death.

Thanks for the read.

I can't believe how nasty some reviewers can be to writers on this Web site! Some of those public comments were uncalled for.

I thought your story was exceptionally hot, imaginatively conceived, and very well written. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it ... both times. I did, however, notice a few things that might be corrected.

Please don't interpret this as my being persnickety, but there were four errors that caught my attention. I am pointing them out to you with an eye toward improving the editing. I am sure these were just oversights. Do you use the site's editors? (I do -- when they respond.)

1. loosing instead of losing

2. importantly instead of important

3. desert instead of dessert

4. to instead of too

Please do not take offense. After I post this, I'm going to read the other submissions you have on the site. If they are anything like this, I'm sure to be as rewarded. Thank you for writing this story.

i thought that it was a sweet fantasy of polyamory with power play. It has a wide-eyed innocence about it and maybe that's why i feel like i have to defend it against you judgmental commentators. i don't see how any regular reader of a sex story website has any claim to such lofty moral high ground that they can hurl abuse at authors when they get squeamish over the content of a story.

Keep writing, murphy621. Or don't, it's up to you.

Despite the writing errors (already pointed out by Ms. English teacher), this read fairly easily and certainly was a different take on the usual LW themes. In fact, maybe it was too different. Themes like domination, S&M (slapping, spanking, etc.) and bisexuality all figured into this story. Despite lack of details, we also fathom that submissive, cuckold Howard, has to lick out cream pies and maybe even clean Paul's cock, as part of his cuckold duties. Is Janet's child even Howard's, since he's apparently not good for much sexually, besides use of his mouth? The way Janet enforced her will on the others, perhaps this story belongs in a different category, like non consent/reluctance? Anyway, was going to give a 3 but bumped it to 4 for originality. Thanks for writing.

... to a woman who belongs to someone else? Yah, you get sex, but you also pay her bills. Divorce her and keep a friends with benefits arrangement. Because there can be no trust in a relationship where your mate's loyalties are so blatantly compromised.

I found the plot and the characters to immature. I understand the average isnt really very intelligent but both of these women come across as people that should not have children. I can understand why people object to them staying married and to a large degree I agree. What I would understand as him divorcing her, her moving in with momma, and him continuing to fuck both of them. Sorry I dont understand caring and providing for someone else's fuck toy. As for god judge and jury, remember just because you like a story and others dont doesnt make them wrong and you right, your bias may cloud your judgement to the point of ignorance.

It seems to me there should be a different category for this type of story.

We know Janet, Paul and Amy's deal. What's with Howard? Or is the answer another category altogether?

HA

There's a power dynamic between Paul & Janet that I would love to see written about. Each of their respective spouses seem to be sublimate thru & thru.

The struggle for supremacy could go either way. There's a chance that the 2 couples could reach an understanding but that too would be a process well worth witnessing.

First, I would add to the English teacher's list

Guilt vice Quilt. (Unless you are guiltily hiding your face in a quilt! Then either is reasonable!)

Sorry 'bout that!

LSD & DigDad, as usual, nailed it, as did several others. This one has good legs for interesting (complex) relationships, including IMHO Harold the Nonentity! Please use these guys generously.

5*

BTW - have not yet read the spin-off.

Was he really that stupid?

Howard should just make blood stains of the worthless cunt cum dumpsters..... 1****

If they didn't have children, they can do what ever stupid stuff they want but they do have children and it will fuck up their little lives.

dead ex wife the whore of the fleet

This writer is so much better than this. Weak, stupid and too far fetched

I like most of.your work, but not this one.

More garbage

Read the comments first so don't waste time reading this shit