by fantasyboy
I stopped reading after the uncle was removing white knickers from his niece who wasn't wearing any!
She was teasing him that she wasn't wearing any knickers, d'oh!!
Okay she says she isn't wearing panties but he touches her knickers commenting I knew they'd be wet. He had NO idea they'd be wet because he thought she wasn't wearing any. Then the story changes from first person to third halfway though. one star
You started off writing in the first person then switched to third.
Your writing is very basic and moves too fast. No sexual content in thete at all.
1☆