All Comments on 'Amy's First Time'

love lesbian stories ,especialy new to the experience .the added bonus was the water play,i love the sport and this girl gets to try 2 things in one night wow

Not trying to rip on your story, it's a really good plot. As far as the language in the story goes, it didn't sound natural, and the measurements were WAY OFF.

Mature Irish male - loved the story!!

i read the frst 2 or 3 paragraphs and instantly knew it was written by a man. and thats not walways a bad thing, but here it was just so obvious. I mean ok so once in a blue moon girls play strip poaker with their friends, and when they do its when there too drunk.... and the measurements? what can i say it could have been good, but it wasnt

Wow I really enjoy reading lesbian watersports stories and this was great.

I agree with the previous comment.. come on, why the measurments? I don't really care if someone weighs 113 pounds... it doesn't add anything to the story.

With this said, I didn't vote. I didn't read the whole thing and I'm not going to give you a 1 just because I don't like your style.

Good luck!

Needs a little more passion. Draw out the action a bit.

One of the worst books I have ever read in my entire lifetime and Im seventy-one.

You are not ever to be called an erotica writer. Horrible