All Comments on 'An All Family Business'

Very strange. Even as fantasy, or fiction, this is preposterous. But original.

Interesting read.

Will there be more chapters? Just this was dull...

Not much sex, considering how much of the story was dedicated to sex, and even that was not much more than "...and then they had sex." The overwhelming majority of the story was a long-winded, complex and convoluted, and frankly BORING premise with which you've done nothing. There was no explanation about what his wife did with the dude who took her to London, or what went on when she and her mother both went to London. Then there's the fact that instead of actually doing something, the guy was only quietly fuming as events proceeded without him doing a thing. What did he do when attempting to confront his wife? "...and then they had sex." So she gets off, and he gets no answers.

Maybe I missed something there. She got off? Then slept the sleep of the well-fucked? And how exactly did this benefit the husband in the long run?

If this was the first page of several, in which there was some kind of POINT, you might have gotten some interest, but as it stands, it's just several minutes of my live I can't get back.

I found too many questions without any answers. This needs a follow up chapter to clear things up.

And what was the point? 2*

Although it may not be obvious to some if you couldn't follow the story line (it is a little higher reading level than most here at Lit), the author isn't a cuck. His father-in-law is. He is the husband of one of Macklin's daughters, so gets a seat in the board, just like the husbands of the other daughters.

It is actually a very well crafted story. To the observant reader, the initial discussion with Ted telegraphed the relationship when he said that Macklin wouldn't even consider having sex with Sarah. I'm not sure where the sex in this story is going to go, but I'll sure read the next installment to find out.

So mummy in law doesnt fuck her husband, she fucks the chairman. The daughter does fuck her husband, is she stepping out on him too? Sure would be more sudpicious if i were the hubby. Definetly needs a ch 2 to see where this tale leads.... Member of the board, dna checks ( yes) , divorce, cut brake lines of mr. BMW, who is daddy of baby 3?

I guess it is time his wife puts out now. she will be a whore for a better job.

sick people they are.

and a curse will descend on the outcome for a new founding father, TK U MLJ LV NV

The story I so often read is apparently not the same one that certain commentators here seem to have read. Am I stupid? I think not, but where does that leave us? Nice story by the way, with great possibilities.

So Sarah won't have incestuous sex with Macklin. But you gave us no hint that she might be PG with hubby, or even that they were trying. That would have helped. Also, the lack of sex with the other mistresses could have been explained by hinting that their husbands had mistresses of their own. Just a subtle hint for any open plot issues will improve your stories. Still, thanks for your creativity.

Agree that the cat was out of the bag when FiL firmly asserted that Sweetie was safe from sexual escapades at the meeting. An interesting arrangement ... where do you find enough willing cucks? Never mind ... in LIT's LW section! About half the commenters, to date, 'get' the arrangement, the rest are all over the place.

I think this story is complete, as is! MiL is happy with her Sperm Donor CEO and her complacent Hubby. Sweetie is happy with her Hubby and their soon-to-be three kids! No meat left on this bone!

4*

I have to say this story is off to a very different start. I think I like it but I'm not sure. Please continue. But.............. there's always a but, you are kind of long winded and could probably cut back on the descriptions, etc. I don't mean cut them out, just edit them down

I think I need to read a couple of more times to understand! I will post another comment once I do understand it better!

However because it is so interesting and would REALLY like to see another chapter I gave it a 5.

One could think so many alternate continuations from here.

Please by a dictionary. Also this story was crap.

The story is not erotic enough.

Writer's craft is excellent.

4*

This "story" is like a circle; completely pointless.

The story/plot in one sentence: Dude gets stressed out wondering what his wife is up to on a business trip, accepts her explanation without evidence.

Only insane people can write such a crap!!!

Whose kid is it?

No point at all.

I have read several of your stories and I have to read carefully to catch your twists. Good stuff.

It's DNA testing time.

The story was told well. I think someone should kill the boss man, strangle him with the umbilical cord of his next bastard. I'm also not sure I would want to raise children with a wife who found that sort of thing to be in any way acceptable.

However, nice twist and an interesting tale. I don't need to like the characters to appreciate the story.

Huh???

The boss's wife has no say so over the divorce. Most churches recognize the need for divorce under those circumstances. In fact the Roman Catholic church and most Orthodox churches grant annulments for refusing to have children.

DNA, then take the director job. Then, NEVER let wifey participate in the company again.

Interesting story in terms of the "who done it genre" but otherwise inane and dull..