by Cromagnonman
A little high strung but good,I hope You finish His plan.
A damned good tale, well told and speedy with it.
I look forward for part (or chapter) 2 with keen interest.
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Handley_Page
Brandon is one cool dude and Faith is right up there with him. A second chapter is called for. Also a brief recap about the reaction of the Bank Manager would be great!
Thanks, CM for another wonderful story. G. R.B.
Cleverly imagineered tale with tricky plot twists and hairpin turns. I do have to agree with the other commentators that you cut it off too abruptly. But as a writer I understand that creating an interesting ending is by far the most difficult labor when writing.
Thank you! My kind of story, my kind of writer!
I did not see it coming - but she was sharp so it was not too big a surprise and no stretch to see it -
Great idea and great execution -
is never going to happen in this chapter. TK U MLJ LV NV
but typical of CMM it leaves open many possibilities. And also SOP the rest is up to us and our imaginations to complete.
There is a small hole in your plot. When he photographed the black note book, he had all of the codes so he didn't have to go back and change it for a duplicate. His bosses could have removed all of the money before the guy leaves on his boat. Note that he would have to photograph every page in order to make an exact duplicate book. So I don't see the need for a duplicate book. The guy would not know that the money was gone since off shore banks don't give monthly statements. You would never keep off shore banking statements in your house since they would be evidence against you!
Still it was a good story.
It was an interesting story and I would encourage you to continue the adventure.
I guess I would have like some more details about the confrontation with the bank manager, those the manager implicated, how the fraudulent sale was overturned, the civil lawsuits brought against the bank and others for their hand in the fraud and how Faith liked the farm. Still 5 stars
i would also like to echo the comments of my anonymous companion in this public arena. A little more would have been fun! 5***** Thank You
A really good story. Love it. The confrontation with the bank manager would have been nice. AAAAAA+++++