by PolyLvr
It has a certain ugly realism that's quite appealing, after the sometimes plastic feeling of so many stories here. A unique plotline. The sex is a bit perfunctory, but that's not so bad, for what it tries to be.
I'm glad to have read it.
The story line is unusual which gave the story appeal. The ending was very sudden, but it leaves room to explain. The relationship needs more description like how they ended up lovers the first time. The ending jumped a decade or two leaving out many details. A few more chapters could nicely round things out.
RS
Still waiting. I see background, I see detail, all very nice. But what? Did you have to take a crap or something? The ending is too abrupt, and missing the sex. In case you were wondering.
I think maybe I jumped around too much in the story. There was no sex because it isn't a sex story, it's more a love story.
They didn't become lovers until she rejoined him at the hotel where they had stayed before her arrest. The ending only jumps a few years into the future and alludes to the fact that they have children and they live together as a normal family.
If I have to explain a story it means I didn't do a very good job. Thanks for your comments.
This feels the way a man would tell another person how he married his wife. Not a lot of details, but enough to share the important background parts.
I may tell you how I met my wife, but I'm sure not going to tell you what we do in bed.
Your story is a gentle romance, if a druggie knock-off can be gentle.
I did enjoy that.
Every story here shouldn't need to be saturated with sex... granted it's an erotica site but erotica means erotic not sexual...
And you didn't need to explain what the story clearly related... the story said the sex that occurred at the end was her first...
I'm not sure what I had expected but it does seem like a more realistic Happily Ever After...
this would never happen a girl attracted to her step father right more like hime raping her and threatening her that's real, This is pure drivoul and nonsense LEARN TO WRITE and for god dake get a damn editor your grammar is atrocious. you listed this as incest which is fine but it's not incest it's RAPE a step father and stepdaughter are never family so therefore it's rape and he should be thrown in prison. You as well should go to prison for subjecting me to this crap you think is literotica, don't quit your day job if you've even got one since you probably live in your daddy's basement tell him you need an ass fucking for the shit you post
Please ignore the ignoramus who claims to know grammar and then proceeds to make spelling mistakes, I think this is actually pretty good.
I found it realistic and heart warming..., the type of thing I could imagine being expanded and made into a film.
Keep up the good work. :-)
Should have told the judge and jury why she did it. It would have mitigated her sentence.