by mind_sex
Little things like attention to grammar distract from the story - passed, not past. It is taut, not taught.
All in all it has the potential to be a good story. Keep trying.
..... Diego needs to open a massage studio a blocks from Sarah's dormatory at her all womens college and let us know what happens after his complimentory three margarita massages !!!
Sally Saw What Sarah Received for 2 Long Minutes! She Wants The Same, Maybe With Her Daughter! Family Together And ALL That!