All Comments on 'Angels Ch. 01'

Please have someone proof your work. The spelling mistakes are distracting.

I dont understand where this story is going.

The story was sent through the editor program. Also the first chapter is just to get to know the charecters......what part confused you?

I like the start of the story. You might consider asking someone to edit/proofread for you, however that has nothing to do with the story as a whole. I like the writer angle you've taken. I look forward to the rest of this story and will be watching for it.

Good stuff. I like its direction.

The story is OK, but not the last line. And you editor obviously only checks spelling, not context. Get a human to read it through.

Stan

The story has been edited again and has been submited

I loved it! Wow, so hot and damn sexy with a mischief maker too!