All Comments on 'Ann'

How hot can it get. I really liked it, but would have liked Ann to have been fucked in her virgina to consumate the union of brother and sister.

"What are you doing "she asks standing there nude,"waiting for a No 10 bus "he answers equally nude and sporting a raging erection.If you do not go on with this ,well words fail m;acceptable very very acceptable.

Condoms and quick,then they can really do IT,her vagina awaits.

A great pity about the anal,only thing wrong with this ,never even thought of anal with my sister,pregnancy or not please carry on.

You really have got it wrong look at the comments ANAL is the big mistake,but all is not lost next time [and I hope there will be a next time ]forget all about the anal,you have the makings of a great series here.You just dont do that with your sister the first time ,later maybe.

Similar situation for me ,we took up where we left off when much younger ,like some other comments dont like the Anal,I believe they would have [and should have ]risked it.A sequel is out, the damage is done in my opinion.

The story is good, but you should think about using an editor. You jump tenses a lot. Either have it present tense or past tenses try not to put them in the same sentence. Still the story was good.

with a lot of the comments - why does Anal sex figure so prominently in most of these Incest stories - it is not the normal way of making and showing LOVE - please keep to other ways of pleasing both parties

I would have liked a bit more of a set up about these two, but I can overlook that otherwise. I did notice that you went back and forth between tenses and that was distracting. One minute you would be speaking in a past tense, as in "I wrapped my arms around her body." And then in the very next sentence, you jumped back to present tense, as in "Her hair falls on my arm." It's also unclear what the trigger was - why did the narrator finally decide to take his sister? Was there a defining moment? <br><br>

And the anal sex as their first sexual intercourse was also disappointing to me. First, he talks several times about wanting to impregnate her, and she seems excited by the idea. So what is the big deal about "no sex without a condom"? How about pulling out? And I must say, while some women get pregnant at the drop of a hat, most do not. We have cycles, times when we are more fertile, and even then, it's not a sure thing. Getting pregnant, especially for an older woman, is actually a lot tougher than you might think. I'd say this was definitely more of a story for men, who seem to like anal a lot more than most women do.

way to forceful for me i couldn't even finish as soon as you started the force i quit it is never good you need to be bitch slapped it is never acceptable to use force it only proves he really doesn't love her

This, badly missed the mark in several key ways as others have mentioned. The changing tense; poor vocab; using both force and anal in what, otherwise, attempts to be a tender loving story; also, the lack of any buildup or much back story. There could be much more description for the senses as well.

This was a great story, not only did it contain lots of sex in graphic detail the story also expresses passion in a way most stories on Literotica cannot even come close to achieving.

Ann, PLEASE keep writing!

I look forward to seeing many more of your stories in the future.

Great story, please continue the narrative.