by writerotica
All the makings of a great fetish story, RUINED by your inane uses of loooooooooooooong, draaaaaaaaaaaaaaawn out words.
Learn that less is more, or leave writing to writers.
My wife is also a La Leche league leader and I have experienced many of the same things. Lots of counselling phone calls at all hours of the day or night. I must admit it was always pleasant having so many milk filled breasts around...lol I would have loved it for my wife to have acted out your story but I am afraid it would never happen but then again you never know.
I loved your story. "leave writing to writers" what an asshole.
Unique story line...surprisingly hot. Now, if you'll excuse me...i'm going to get myself a glass of milk and cool off.
It was fabulously hot story. Can you stay with the scene, the C-cup growing larger with this situation & perhaps surprising by a huge titted visiting nurse or buxom young babysitter or at-home or lingerie store with a large breasted doll measuring & being turned on (or turning on our friends). Please keep writing!
In general a good, exciting story, but some of the dialog and descriptive writing could use some polishing. Don't get me wrong, I did like it, even though lesbian is not my favorite theme.
Another point is the milk doesn't squirt into the back of the throat, more like flows silkily over the tongue, but my experience is limited to my wife only. At my first taste, I was surprised how sweet it as as well.
I'm not a writer, so I guess I can take all the ooooooooh and aaaaaah's and live with them. Congratulations! Nice erotic exciting story, I enjoyed it even though i'm not into lesbianism. 60 year old George
Good god that was hot. I enjoy reading nice lesbian stories, but I think it was my private breastfeeding fantasy that made this a red hot story for me.
...but not great. You need to proofread better. Particularly with the punctuation. It became distracting, and interrupted the flow of the story. What you did manage to write was mostly very sexy! Nice job!
Very hot. More actual milk drinking would be nice, but it did not keep me from getting very aroused. Loved the lesbian theme because I am one. My partner and I do this together daily and it is amazing.
As a lover of lactation stories and the smooth way you had these ladies interacting it was great. Thank you for writing. I have read these before and will read the rest of your stories tomorrow.