All Comments on 'Annie Babysits the Kids Ch. 03a'

Please keep going!

At the mall out of the car while they shop would have notched it up.

Sadly real life rears it's head way too often. I only have every other weekend off basically "to myself" where I plan on writing in between everything else I'm doing from working 2 weeks, taking care of family, etc.<br><br>

If I waited until the entire story was written you'd never see it probably. This story was literally started TEN YEARS ago for the first 2 chapters. It's only recently I've started working on the the other chapters with rough drafts of 3 (a, b, and c), 4, and 5.<br><br>

I try to get a new one out during that two week period; however, as I said, not being paid to do this and only doing it on my own time and own recreation it's lower on my list of "priorities" than something such as...oh...taking care of my kids during their birthday and such.<br><br>

Chapter 3 was originally 3 chapters...but since they all took place during the same day in the mall and there were three separate "occurrences" there was a logical division. After discussing with several other authors, the general consensus was to combine the 3 chapters, but put them in as separate installments. The Chapter 3A, 3B, and 3C designations are more for my own mind to keep all the "mall" experiences together than actual "incomplete chapters."<br><br>

Sorry if this is confusing...maybe I'll just keep them as separate chapters from now on and not break them into logical sequences, but they still will only be out in roughly every 2 week releases.<br><br>

Chapter 3C will be out this weekend. I have had time to work on it and other than doing some spell and grammar checking its complete...so that will be out soon following 3B.

My question here is if the writer is telling the story from a point of vengence as if he was the wronged party.

You really want me to believe that a Jr. High student is smarter and more cunning than a graduated senior? If so the cheerleader and football player are both dummer than fuck!!! You are really painting this guy as an idiot regardless of his fantasy of other guys fucking his girl friend.

He is a spineless little fucker!!!!

This is what amuses me; Bob claims he loves Annie and he just would like her to open up sexually, but this is more about power than sex. Brian is a clinical sadist. His anger issues when disobeyed give that away instantly. William is close to as bad, his only saving grace being he's not as violent. Annie should have reported them for rape at the very beginning, but I've noticed a distinct lack of backbone or brains in the women in your stories.

As bad as anyone else might be though, Bob is the most morally repugnant player here. He knows what's happening. He knows Annie is likely to be emotionally damaged for life over it. He could stop the abuse anytime...but he doesn't. He doesn't love her, not even a little bit. On top of being part and parcel to her abuse, he's a liar. At least the other players here are honest scumbags. There's not a man in this story who doesn't deserve to have his nuts cut off. If I found out something like this happened to MY girl, the trail of bullet riddled corpses would be frightening.

Hehehe, well, first I'd like to mention this is fantasy, so a psychological profile on everybody probably isn't the best thing. ;) You are right though, my stories have a typical trend of a weak-willed woman getting sexually abused by those around them, and coming to enjoy it...it is simply the type of stories that interest me when I write. It's not everybody's interest, but there is a strong following for these types of stories, so keeps my blog site busy!

It is interesting you mention Brian is worse than William, as I have been trying to portray William to be the worse of the two...but that comes out in future chapters. Also it's been a while since I added a new chapter, but have been working more on my Lapdancing series. Hoping to get back to Annie eventually, so she's not forgotten!

Bob is an odd character. I am trying to make him out not to be morally corrupt, it's just his ideals and such are not exactly normal. He has the heart of a cuckhold, but not in that he enjoys having his woman afterwards, but just willing to share, LOL

Appreciate the comments!

Great flow to the story, and enjoyed Annie being relieved of her shoes and clothes as they drove along the highway. Looking forward to reading more of your work.