by Koco_Kyss
this has been a long time coming, worth the wait, i'm now gunna read the entire story.
I must say, eveything did come full circle and this entire series was a great read but I thought the ending felt kind of flat, I was some how expecting more emotion from Bianca and Tony. Glad everything got resolved and it was a happy ending. KEEP up the good work and continue to write. Hopefully, you write a continuation of this story telling us how Tony's brother NIC is handling things...just a thought
I liked this story, and lord knows I'm always good for a happy ending, but this did feel a bit rushed. Perhaps it's because, as you said, there were errors. I think, though, that the ending may be a bit too pat. Why did Juanita apologize? It seems completely out of character for her. I could believe Richard apologizing and attempting to make amends, but not Juanita. Anyway, i do hop you write more -- it's the only way to get better!
and it is great, i cannot wait for your next effort
please seek out an editor or invest in a read aloud program. You will realize the blarring errors immediately. That was a significant distraction to the story. Seriously, missing articles ....... recheck.Hope the next adventure will see improvement.
I fount this story the other day started reading it last night and just finished it now it was wonderful and I really enjoyed reading it. I like these kind of stories and hope to be able to read more like them thanks so much for sharing I really liked these two a lot and hated to see their story end but oh well all good thing must come to and end they say!!
I just wanted to thank everyone for their constructive comments on this story. The next effort will definitely have improvements:) Thanks again for the support. *Koco Kyss*
I should consider doing a story about Nick Macato. he sound like he is so sexy.
Hang the typos-a great story is beyond that. Some need to stop being so anal.
Oh my goodness dudes you are so blessed with an amazing gift! You remind me of the author sherilyn kenyon. Write more stories plz and thanx hope you have a wonderful life!
even though Bianca mother was a bitch that was a great story ...write more
I know you got some stupid tough critisizims I just have to say
one: love the storyline
two: hated the grammar-- spellin I can take but I'm a grammar freak
third: Elana was the fuckin bomb
1. A mind is a terrible thing to waste - disregard comments from those who can't even spell...lol
2. I loved the plot and the story line - yes there were grammatical errors, but it didn't take away from the story, for I knew what you meant when they were made.
3. Please continue writing...you do have a fan base now...we are waiting :-)
I waited to read the entire story before posting a comment....this was an amazing story. I hope you write a sequel or something. Please keep up the good work...
All in all it was awesome, you just need an editor. You should do Nic's story next!
And I'm glad I did. This was a good story and while there were quite a few errors I was able to look them over because it was such a good story line. It did seem a little rushed at times but nice story. Keep writing.
I'm reading this so late, but I'm glad I found it; and I only have one thing to say.
Holy shit.
This was amazing, like seriously. I love you for writing this, gahh. cx