All Comments on 'Art for Heart's Sake'

Your characters are always so strong, so vivid. Again you don't disappoint with this story.

I am sorry to say that this is like a bad soap. i missed character development. they just met and the next day they were deeply in love and whatever... i know this is a fantasy but still the emotions of the characters have to be realistic...

not as much as Stewie and Jaze. Are you going to be adding any more chapters to Cobalt Blue? This story didn't flesh out like CB.

I've read a lot of stories on Literotica over the last several weeks. There have been a few that have really stood out, and this sweet story is one of them. It struck a chord with me and has stuck with me since I first read it. Thanks for an enjoyable read!

This plotline is only pretty interesting, and the strong lust which becomes devoted love is a good theme. But the writing is not this author's best -- the sex is repetitive and rather dull, and the whole thing rambles.

ok here's the deal. i loved it but there are some things u should focus and practice in the future. ok so here goes......the story was un realistic there can be no way they fall in love that quickly and also the story seemed to be rushing, it was like u were racing and some of the events didnt really mix. also did u notice u had no climax?

obviously written by an experienced bottom,,oh such memories

I can't even count the number of times I've read this story, and all you work for that matter, and I never get tired of it! Love your writing!!!

i know what you mean, i can't remember the number of times i've read it either. i just love this story!

this was an amazing story. loved every minute of it. x

I just loved reading this story!! It's simply wonderful!

I didn't think this was all that well-written. I mean, you jump from one guy's mind to the next without any pause/separator/warning. It reminded me of kids playing leapfrog. I couldn't even finish the first page.

it wasn't bad or anything I was just confused a lot of the time. it was hard to keep track of the action. I don't mind this story. not my favourite but hey, not all stories are. decent storyline

Ignore the nay sayers.... It was fun and riveting. I thought the younger brother was such a great addition to the couple; it was handled perfectly. Please keep writing and ignore anyone who can't appreciate a love story

Please write another story about Ryan, james and tim.

the comments that say they couldn't follow this wonderful story. I had absolutely no problem following this story I loved it the love between the brothers and the way James's bro looked after Ryan and thought of him as family was beautiful. Congrat Pelaam on a warm loving story and I for one wouldn't mind reading more of their story.

I love this story, it's one of my favorites that I've read again an again. I had no trouble following the story and loved how they became a super close family so quick.

As ever from you, a well written and compelling story. Perhaps the twits who cannot follow the story are also incapable of working out if they have missed a page? It is the only thing I can think of which would make the story hard to follow - if they missed a page. Ignore the illiterate and keep writing your fantastic stories! More! More! More!

your work is amazing i wouldn't be surprised if your got all of your work published

Sweet, thank you - makes a nice change from the sadistic crap we've been getting lately. Needs maybe a bit more development before "they're in love" - that happens too fast to be convincing, and there are some odd things that need work - why would he need to phone his brother to deal with the boy - that doesn't ring true for a character who's a successful businessman, also, to have the boy lose his virginity with his lover's brother in the next room? Introducing the brother into the apartment at all that night doesn't really make sense.

Would suggest, for emphasis, use italics rather than asterisks, and for "thoughts", use italics, or single quotation marks ('Yes, yes, yes,' he thought), or nothing at all. The double oblique bars are too disruptive, visually.

it's a fast paced kind of love but still rings true for me as am sure it happens sometimes even in real life.

I don't imagine reading anything so touching and loving on this site. Hat's off to you man. Just SO great!!

One of the sweetest stories, I've seen on here. Look forward to more from you. good luck and merry Christmas.

Excellent story. Great characters and the relationships between them were great.

the only small thing, really small thing that drove me nuts was when he kept putting 'man' at the end of ever sentence. I love you man or that sounds great man. The repetition and just how it sounded drove me crazy.

too much sex too quickly. Also Ryan's continual habit of calling James man is obnoxious rather than endearing it seems to be his go to term for any male who is kind to him. Including Tim, he may as well call them dude. If he is so in love with James would he no have a special term of affection as James does for him? And no terms don't count if used during sex only.

This story is AWESOME & REAL,

The use of 'man' is really annoying and not cute at all. What kind of a pet name is 'man'? It gives the impression that Ryan doesn't really like James and is just fooling around with him. Other than that, it was a really nice story

Well written very sensual

Fantastic story. Thank you.