by silken_desirez
Unbelievable. I was captivated.
Love the writing style.
Don't change it.
And now, to go read it again.
One of the hottest things I have read. The thought processes they have...fucking sexy.
I had no trouble understanding where you were going. I guess I think of stream of consciousness as arty, where yours seemed expository. You did largely dispense with grammar though. Anyhow, I liked it.