All Comments on 'Ashton'

Nice, very nice. I could have gone on for a few more pages

Perhaps you will add a few more chapters, good read and I'd like to see where it goes from here.

Very good reading material. I just got annoyed at how it was written in present tense. Maybe try past tense next time. Additionally, I suggest trying to cut-down on pronouns in your work, it can become a little repetitive or even ambiguous. Overall though, great work!