by hroy2
The only thing wrong with this is that there isn't enough of it! I wanted to be there for their second and third times, too.
Lukas
This story was provocative at times and yet it still left something to the imagination. Next time try adding a little more depth to the scenes. Things like how he thought she smelled, the sweat rolling down her back, try adding more details so that the readers will truly be able to visualize themselves as either the man or woman in your story. I gave your story a 3 out of 5. It was good, but could have been better.
A well written and thought provoking story, very realistic. and well in keeping with this authors talents.
my only regret is it was not longer.