All Comments on 'Average Exception'

I love your writing style and imagery, the only reason i didn't give you a 100 was because this part is so short. you've introduced the players, but none of the plot. Excellent job.

I must agree with the first commentor. Your style is refreshingly articulate and descriptive. I think I'll enjoy reading your story.

Now for the negative. Your intro is a bit short even for laying foundation. You gave us a bio of the characters but no interaction. I would have preferred some sort of insight into just how the two youngsters really intertwine in preparation for future "chapters".

Don't be in a hurry to get your story on Literotica. Tease us, but don't shortchange us.

Looking forward to future chapter(s).

more please!

Good start but you should have set the plot before ending the chapter. The way it is you guit before you started. You need to have a story plot to keep interest going for the next chapter. You are still doing the introduction. It is good and I will be looking for the next installment.

continue to write more :]

why did you write this so called story it says nothing and should not be in the incest/taboo area you said nothing that was taboo or incest you should have written more the way it is it is nothing but drivel

so the whole story is just an introduction suggest you actually add several pages complete the story and then if needed add a part two