All Comments on 'Back to Bristol Ch. 16'

6 more chapter of this stuff

Gary has the ability to put on paper the often boring details of a complex, messy divorce and possible reconciliation. Contrary to many of the stories on this forum, these situations do not resolve easily, nor without considerable baggage.................

There are some really interesting characters in this story and I wonder how many of them are based on real people and events? ..................

I still think that Peter is going to do something dramatic that will force Chris to face his feelings for Molly. Perhaps kidnap her and run off to Wales. I can just see his rationale that he is the only one that truly loves her and she just doesn't understand what is going on and is confused. A month or so of enforced bliss with him will make it all OK and they will return to the ideal happy family that they were before Chris intruded on them.

For all those complaining about the story, no one is putting a gun to your head and forcing you to read it, are they?

Boyd

comments are letting the writer know if the people like or dislike their stories.nobody hate the writer,its' the prolonging of the story.its'a good story,but to many details not needed.

You know you don't have to click on the story if you don't want to read it. Is posting a stupid "Stop the Madness" type comment every day some sort of protest? If so just what are you protesting? Stories that are to long for your short attention span?

Literotica.com has somehow managed to COMPEL some readers to continue reading stories which they find abhorent. This diabolical trickery must cease. Next thing you know folks will be compelled to actually read the articles in Playboy!

they would solve their separation with another nice roll in

the hay and thereby guarantee Chris's right to be classified as an immoral person. But it is amazing how Jeanette managed to get through to Molly's subconscious mind and in almost one afternoon switch all the wiring. In fact I think that Gary is

going rather fast!

Molly has come a long way. It couldn't have been easy but she stood up to her mother. That had to be very traumatic for her. I love this story, sorry to keep repeating that phrase but it says it all..

i just finished this series all 22 chapters of them that someone here led me to ..all together it was a very good series ...and yes i liked the ending but i usually dont like this particular ending as a matter of course ...but just tos ay why not write romanticals and make money

NOT read the remaining chapters posted on another site,so will those that have, please stop boasting and hinting at the ending,as I want to read it myself.I bet those people are the sort that read the last chapter of a crime novel first,so they can suspect the guilty person all the way through.

I’m very impressed with GaryAPB and his tale. We are progressing at a clip that allows the characters to develop and grow. The business background and that of the family members coming into and out of the picture just add flavor. End paragraph. To those who complain about the pace, I can only say stop whining, grow up and get an attention span and intellectual depth or switch to the many “quickie” “stroke” stories available on this site. End paragraph. I’m very upset about the complete release of the entire story on another site. I feel somewhat betrayed by this. I did go to the site (I’d peek, I admit.) The site insisted that I sign up and give them my Email and allow cookies. I’m only vaguely aware of cookies and what sites have created them on my computer. Every so often, I wipe them all out, especially if I have some problem with the computer. Take that you demon cookie creators. I never give my Email if I can avoid it, twenty or more a day is just too much to delete and/or organize. Anyway, I did not get to peek at the ending, Curses!! End paragraph. I just read something by DGHear, who writes a pleasant tale on occasion. As in contrast to GaryAPB, Hear’s seemed rushed and almost illogical. So much for speed. End Paragraph. Another point is that of Chris’s talking to everyone about the situation. While I doubt that this would occur with so many different people in real life, it is necessary to be able to spread the various discoveries and advice to a wide field to move the plot forward. End Paragraph

Just to clarify a couple of things:

Literotica is working 8 days behind. It takes 8 days between my submitting a chapter and it appearing. So, these comments, (some interesting and intelligent, some useless) have no influence on this story. I may learn from them, but they don't influence this story.

I posted it elsewhere only after all chapters were submitted to Literotica. Literotica take 8 days, other sites take less than 1 hour. I can't influence that.

But, if you've read it all elsewhere, please don't spoil it for those who like their daily chapter.

Thank you.

Only six more chapters

One of the things that makes this story so interesting for me is the contrast that Gary is constantly drawing between the characters and somewhat similar events. For example, this chapter draws some wonderful contrasts between Peter and Chris in terms of their reaction to a pending divorce and it also shows Molly's contrasting reaction to her two divorces.<p>

The Chris/Peter dichotomy is very telling. Outwardly, Chris reacted to his divorce in a restrained manner, keeping his feelings bottled up. Peter, on the other hand is wearing his emotions openly, using every trick in his arsenal to get Molly back, including denigrating Chris (while Chris is "playing the gentleman" and refusing to badmouth Peter). <p>

Molly's behavior still is a cypher. Her conversation with Chris' Mum ("I just thought I could wear a short skirt and seduce him") at least initially seems to imply an arrogance and dismissive attitude towards the ordeal that Chris went through, but her later comments seem to indicate that she is finally beginning to understand.<p>

Her attitude towards Peter also seems strange. Her obvious concern and worry seems to be at odds with her words to Chris that he is her "main man". It also shows that curious gap in understanding how her actions have the ability to hurt Chris. <p>

But perhaps most confusing is her anger and refusal to allow Chris to attack Peter even obliquely when he tries to get her to understand that Peter seduced her. Personally, I think that I would be extremely hurt if the woman I loved refused to believe or even listen to me until she had her nose rubbed in the truth by a third party. Where is her trust of Chris? <p>

Maybe her behavior is a defense mechanism to justify her actions. Maybe her refusal to believe that Peter was lying (even in the face of overwhelming evidence) and strident defense of his honesty (as opposed to her passive reaction to Peter's attacks on Chris) is more a reflection of her view of Chris and Peter. She sees no reason to defend Chris because he is strong and can defend himself while Peter is weak and needs her defense. Who knows but its fun to speculate! <p>

Finally, after reading this chapter, I started to wonder "what if". Specifically, what would have happened to Molly & Peter's marriage if Chris had never come back to Bristol. Molly has all but admitted that her marriage to Peter was based on lies (on both parts). She claims to respect and like Peter but with an underlying despair over her lost love. If Chris had not upset the applecart by returning, would they have muddled on in a marriage with a hole in the middle or, would Molly have lost it some day and finally snapped? <p>

Once again, its a mark of a good story that the characters are so well developed that we as readers can speculate on the what if's. <p>

CCM

It's nice to see Molly get some redeeming qualities. We've heard people talk about what type of person Molly is, it's good to finally see her show a little of it. For those upset with how the story got published, while you remind yourself just how much you paid to read a story someone else invested their time and effort into, think about the concept of gratitude.

It's a simple as that people. While sometimes I've become annoyed with the characters' behavior, it's because Gary has written very realistic, flawed human beings. In real life, people do behave irrationally, or sometimes refuse to see what's in front of their eyes, or choose a more passive role and allow stronger personalities to direct them. <br><br>

In real life, people make mistakes, sometimes quite awful ones. It's easy to condemn them for it. What's not easy is to try to find a way to forgive them for their mistakes, and not let one mistake wipe out years of what they did right.<br><br>

In fact, I think Molly might want to reconsider her decision that she will never forgive her mother for what she did. After all, hasn't Molly be wanting forgiveness for her transgressions? I guess she doesn't see the irony in refusing to even consider that after time and healing, she might be able to forgive her mom. <br><br>

Susan is not a good person. She's extremely selfish and all her actions have been motivated by what would make her happy, not what would make her own child or husband happy. But she didn't hold a gun to Molly's head when she was urging certain choices on her. Molly simply went along and accepted what her mom said, instead of thinking for herself. It takes two to tango, as they say, and while Susan might have been the leader, Molly followed. <br><br>

I like that Chris and Molly are finally talking through some things. If nothing else, they seem to be rebuilding a tenuous friendship.

I do a lot of reading as you well know and in terms of writing a longer than 3 or 4 chapter story - this gentleman has taken over 1st place in more than just my mind from the comments.<P>

It takes a certain talent and discipline and standards to do what is being done here as well as it is.<P>

My thanks to you Author - you are greatly appreciated and looked forward to.<P>

With Very High Regard

He is asking Molly all these questions to what end?? So he has something to reject any idea of reconciliation, that he can point to, when anyone asks, and he seems like the injured one.. He's not the least interested in reconciliation.. Still, I feel it's an exercise in futility for Molly.. She is hoping so strongly that he'll take her back and there is nothing that will convince him to do so.. It makes a good soap opera for all the characters in the story and the readers, too and like a soap opera it could go on forever.. But, I love happy endings so I continue to read it to see if there is something that should happen to accidently change his mind about his relationship with Molly.. Another chapter please.

<p>Here we have more drinking on page 1 of this chapter and it continues to page 2 where our ‘hero’ decides to take his boys to the pub! What is Chris thinking by this action and Ralph too for that matter? Later there is another G&T with Molly, and then when she leaves there is another to wash away sorrows. In fact, <b>every</b> meeting with Molly must include alcohol.</p>

<p>As for Molly, I am annoyed with the meticulous recall of facts from 4 years ago. Her memory for that minutiae conflicts with her being such an airhead in the entire process. How can Chris look upon her as the victim when she was a co-conspirator? His vision of her is consistently flawed. Perhaps the alcohol plays a part?</p>

<p>In this chapter, the realization came to me that everyone runs away from confrontation in this story: for Peter it is to his cottage, for Susan its Weymouth, for Ralph its Madeira. Molly then runs to Chris to ‘hide’ from her mother, and of course, for Chris; he runs to the bottle. The story is overpopulated with cowards.</p>

Just a stupid woman who's belief it was a mutual flash of real passion was only a tired well used alcohol seduction and was more of a "I want to fuck the bitch" than anything else. Thanks mom.

an author can write the most complex interesting story about human beings doing what human beings do -- being stupid and screwing up their own lives and other people's and dealing with the consequences -- and some Real Man will come along and reduce the whole thing to: "Just another lousy bitch-who cares?"

run the pedophile off the site.

"Think of yourself sitting in that sewer, with shit washing over you. You'll be grateful for the breaks when no one flushes"

BTDTBTFT!

Enough said (good descriptor - made for a shuddering visual)

Molly said: "No. I thought all I would have to do was wear a short skirt, bat my eyelashes once or twice, and we could get back to where we once were."

That is because you are nothing more than a slut, Molly, just a slut. That is how a slut thinks. You bedded a man while being married to another and then repeated it by seducing the first man while married to the second. That in my book is the epitome of slutdom. You are a slut of the first degree.

Once again, she refuses to see the real Peter. I’m glad she found out the truth behind the grapa story.

Yes, she was seduced by a master, and she was under the influence, but she STILL could have, and should have, resisted him.

Re: legal claim against Susan – as wrong-headed as she was, she THOUGHT she was doing what was best for her daughter. She had no evil intent.

Maybe, MAYBE, if someday Susan sees the error of her ways, and TRULY apologizes, she can at least be allowed a relationship with her grandchildren.

Congrats. Another good chapter. Four out of five. But I swear the author is trying to kill me with this roller coaster story. Chris tries to explain to Molly about what a cad Peter was with her and she runs away. Then she talks to Jeanette. Chris finally, finally gets to explain in detail to Molly about how Peter seduced her and I was holding my breath thinking any minute she was about to run away again and not let him finish. Whew. Also it was nice to see Susan get hers. Cheers Steve L.

Jeeze this guy is anal... he could overthink putting toast in a toaster... either you love her or you don't... either you want to be with her or you don't.... man this character is irritating... and all the people he's giving updates to... he might as well just put out a daily newsletter... and ftr.... the reason people continue to read a story they don't really like is so that they can find out what happens at the end... even tho sometimes it turns out to be a chore...

-jaye-

You didn't say whether Peter's letter was typed :)

One point raised in this letter was that Chris would never take her back. Chris should have had the decency to tell Molly that Peter was correct about that snippet of information - at least that it was his intention not to.

But as usual he didn't man up.

about 2/3 down page 2... (I have a large font hahaha)

In the meeting of the families at Les Jardins, Molly mentions a person named Margot who got grilled by Chris' mother prior to the wedding. This I think slipped through the editing, actually there were a few places an editor might have been helpful , but I digress.

At what point do the characters stop beating this dead horse and try for forgiveness? I guess it comes around chapter 20 or so but it does seem to get a bit drawn out as other issues unfold in the "life".

Author can't complain, I'm still reading this tale...

Smokepole

I like reconciliation stories. In the comments on many of these stories, one complaint against them is that the reconciliation comes too fast, too easy, without the issues underlying the problems being dealt with. I sometimes have this same problem with those stories, although it does not loom as large to me as some others simply because I am so amenable to reconciliation -- although there are limits beyond which it is not possible. I do not see how a person could have this complaint about Back to Bristol. Chris refuses the T & P (tits and pussy) seduction that Molly assumes will make things OK. They are meeting twice a week. Talking with others. Molly is seeing a therapist. Even so, the reconciliation is in doubt. Of course, this is assuming reconciliation is going to happen; after all, it is in the story tags. So assuming that, then this is a well thought out reconciliation story, from what originally appeared to be so grievous an offense that getting back together was unthinkable. Congratulations to GaryAPB.

Still getting laughs from the comments.

Paul in Oklahoma

Anony 05/27/17 Margot is Brians wife. Chris brother. Shows how you read the story. And then you make stupid comments. I just wonder how many other are like you, I read a comment on one other chapter on this story, where someone called Chris Jack. I really think you are not reading, just shimming to what you think are the high points. Im not saying just saying.

I continue with my second reading of this story and am more impressed with it than earlier as I go along. I am envious of the author's skill with dialogue. This is dialogue written by a person who knows the details of sentence structure. Usually, good-English dialogue comes out stilted, but not Gary's. Odd that a grammatical error [long ago] came from the lips of Brian, a professor of English!

Too much mush and wish washy dialogue scenes

Story has gotten far too maudlin and edging into boring

Again, superb character development.

Good writing but even then, all the past actions and hurt feelings that are around in this relationship seems completely opposed to reconciliation.

Additionally, and more of a general point, I noted that the only way for this author to progress the story line towards a reconciliation is by making up a crisis which then needs to be handled by the ex-husband as the women seems completely incapable of making live decisions or even just getting her shit together... Which again, not great long term relationship material.

"But I have to admit it was far more his fault than yours, you were a victim."

That's bullshit. She willingly led herself into that situation.

and I absolutely love how Chris gets on a high horse against Susan, spouting about immorality and how he doesn't want his children exposed to it but he tucked tail and ran, leaving his sons to be raised by Peter, a serial womanizer and homewrecker, and Molly, an adulterous slut and a whore.

Way to fail champ.

If Susan thinks so highly of Peter, she should fuck him herself. Hmmm. Maybe she has been?

RC from Kansas - It seems this story series is a bit much for some commentators. It's been top notch 5 all the way thru; but some might think I'm near a low life probably.

Sigh. While this is a very well written story with very few grammatical errors and few typos.

Still it is entirely too drug out. This would be better for pysch. 101 students to read as part of their class.

This also brings to mind my having previously comments that these sites need to vote/grading systems.

While I could give this a 5* rating as far as quality of writing. I, at best, can only do a 3* as far as premise of the whole thing.

The author has entirely too many people involved in the lives of the MMC and FMC. Not to mention how flaky the MMC is about not coming to a conclusion as to what to do about Ex-wife and his life. And yet the author wants us to believe he is a very insightful MD of a successful company.

Does not fly.

Does the stupid cow ever do anything but cry?

She cheats on him and the MC say she is a victim too? Why can’t women ever be accountable for their own actions?

Bigdee, in the comment below, makes a valid point. I've also rmbeen expecting to discover that Susan and Peter have been having an affair.

Though it's just as likely that Susan just took an instant dislike to the MC. Some people are like that, they just don't like people and nothing rational or otherwise can get them to change. Mostly they wouldn't even be able to coherently explain to themselves, let alone others, as to why they dislike the person, even if they make up some posthoc rationalisations that seem on the surface to be credible.

This is a soap opera, but I am hooked!