by blackfen
You should send this script to Spielberg. Maybe he would make another sequel of Back to the future. A very different and a very erotic sequel. Lol.
This author is infatuated with the idea of having a large penis and refers to its size too often. This ruins the effect of an otherwise interesting plot.
My guts tells me that all will not be alright with Jamie's attempts to out fox Mother Nature and Old Man Time! Fabulous mom might well be worthy of his efforts, but my opinion he's too smart for his own good. There are people like that in the real world; high I.Q. (Mensa) type people have little or no common sense!
WHAT A WASTE OF TIME JUST WALK ACROSS THE HALL DROP YOUR SHORTS AND FUCK THE SLUTS BRAINS OUT. OR WAIT TILL DAD GETS LOST IN TIME. THEN FUCK HER BRAINS OUT. THE WHOLE STORY WAS A WASTE OF TIME. .................LAROC OF AGES
Why extremely beat round bush when he could just fuck her in the now... unless his father is him and all the other possible predictable endings.
(I'm posting this here because I've already posted an anonymous comment after Part 04)
You pulled a switch up.... changed author names to Dirty Slut to finish the story??
Good finish but why the author name change? Kinda dumb wouldn't you say? (stupid would be a more precisely accurate word to use)
Why does the mother only use the word "Baby" as a term of affection? the kid is definatly not a baby and neither is the husband. It could use a bit of changing the baby's to something else. Other than that grating and story killing overuse of a word it was awsome.
I agree that there is no need to go back in time.
Unless son wants to take mom where she was kinda reluctant,but in this case, go one big circle,steal the machine, just to fuck a slut mom?Oh come on...
I agree that there is no need to go back in time.
Unless son wants to take mom where she was kinda reluctant,but in this case, go one big circle,steal the machine, just to fuck a slut mom?Oh come on...
finish the story and let us know about what else did you see her doing when you travel on time.