by rye_gares
I think so far it's a great story. Loved the character's descriptions and the story line hold a lot of potential. The only thing I could suggest is next time making the chapters longer. Other than the shortness in length, I don't see anything but a great story in the works here. I for one will definitely be on the lookout for the next part! :-)
I know it has been along time since this story was first posted but if you ever get around to posting again know that I am definitely looking forward to more of this story.