by magmaman
Funny, concise, to the point, and I really liked the ending (he made the correct choices and I think he's in for a good ride). Well done!
A shame a lot of women belong in this category, there are some very good ones out their but unfortunately worthless boys trying to be men, have fucked with their brains.
About halfway through the story, I noticed that this was a sequel to "Bitch! Took the Dog". Nice closure! Well Done!
A friend of mine said it all when he described his ex-wife, "There's something wrong with her. That poontang is evil." And she was too.
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Great story, magmaman. Thanks for the memories.
I didn't understand the point of this story at all, other than a guy bragging about how tough he is or how much money he has. This story was self-absorbed drivel at best. Such a tough guy, take out 2 guys bigger than you and the 3rd was scared, even the 2 cops that showed up were scared of you because you had a WHOLE 3 years of karate? LMAO, I have been taking martial arts for 25 years, and even I know you aren't faster, better or "scary" enough to beat a bullet. There was no need to have any of that in there. Please get over yourself and just WRITE.
Don't even have a clue as to what you are trying to say here.
Could've been a better build up, but all in all a nice ending for a change. I would have liked to have seen Patty try to con him again...see some serious sex but as far as payback goes...me likee.
It was enjoyable and well written, with an element of truth in it. I read a lot into it, perhaps you meant it, perhaps I just filled in the blanks, but that was part of the fun. I do agree it might have been better in the romance section in many ways.
wow.... fucking great story. superb. Just BULLY!!!!
clearly he did mean something to Penny b/c a cunt like that can always get some stupid man to take care of her. Even if it was sexual he had an impact on her if 10 years later Penny returns.
I dont know if anyone is wondering this along with me.... but I am dying to know was going through Penny's mind when he shut her down and walked out.
Just the right amount of suspense. Would our hero be able to resist the skank? Nicely done, thanks for writing.
I can usually find something wrong with most stories. I'll read it again. Maybe you missed a punctuation or something.
Seriously, correct category and great story.
Short and sweet, thanks for the read. I would have wanted more which means you did right by this story.
<p>It wasn't elaborate with a huge revenge twist, it wasn't hard to follow, what it was was a basic "you know your not really a nice person and I don't need to be here" moment of clarity between two people and the ex husband moving on with his life. Kinda of like a true awakening at long last.</p>
<p>Nice story</p>
-Risq
Sterling Author and quite to the point once his memory kicked in.<P>
You are always appreciated in a consequencial way.<P>
With High Regard
Thanks author, the story was a fun read, enjoyable and entertaining. I seem to be the only one who missed the significance of the fact that she never orgasmed. Is that an indication of the fact that she did not really love the sex, just used it to get what she wanted?
60 year old George
Wonderfully done. I will use you as a role model as I write my stories.
Thank you for a well thought out and realistic story! You never know how good you have it (or those would love you) until you come face to face with your mistakes.
Patty knew she was broke with baggage in tow so she comes back to make his life hell and squeeze him for more money but he aint stupid .
Pat
Looking forward to a no wimps happy ending with lots of tears, heartbreak, and revenge.
Short and well told - how refreshing. And you get to leave us with a taste for more, now that is one criterion which only few authors can pass.
A simple story but very well told, beautifully paced. Have you tried detective stories? You have the tone and dialogue just right. Thanks.
Essentially all in the head of the protagonist with minimum
dialog but it leaves with the feeling that you are a kindred
soul who feels all that "he" feels.
I also agree with RePhil write another soon.
story before, and am VERY glad I read this one. Great!!!! Got to read more of this writer's work.
And healthy growth again - nice to see - keep it up -
Sometimes what we need IS right n front of us - lol
Five Stars. Bitch got her non-violent but definite comeuppance . Living with a sweet chocolate sista' can indeed be the best revenge !
An old sank from the past was rejected. Excellent. And ther's a ch.2. Here I go...
I like a romance. Especially if it is well-written.
This story is very thoughtful and humorous but deep at the same time. A very serious situation with decisions that could be life changing. People are who they are. This chapter shows a great example of that.
Sometimes you have to face your past to move on. There is a difference between love and obsession. How many people have old flames that they think about, and what might have been. Try looking them up on Facebook now...the fantasy quickly evaporates as you can see the direction they took in life was the reason you parted company all those years ago. It is a great lesson to be honest and let relationships grow or end quickly.
I was worried when he first saw her and got a hard on, glad he walked out on her!
My only issue is why he didn't tell Patty to get lost when she came to his office.
She obviously is just after his money, AGAIN!
look for a port to ride out the "whether", TK U MLJ LV NV
He sold just kill himself. I hate people who write men who are this stupid. She is an ex for a very good reason. Just talking to the whore he deserves castration he does nor deserve to be male. If yo u think this is a man you are not either.
Got the same treatment from my ex. I responded the same way... told her to go find and fuck one of the 'studs' she'd cheated on me with and heard her crying while I walked away.
and bells should be blaring in his cranium, TK U MLJ LV NV
Is that it?nothing about him and Tammy and his ex wife's reaction to his snub. what
Just the way I like 'em. My cheating ex-bitch thought she could just waltz back into my life, too. I knew she was a great fuck so I fucked her, then reached into my pocket and handed her two Twenties and said, "Thanks. Do you have a business card so I can call you next time?" She threw the money back at me and called me a motherfucker. I gave her my best look of surprise and said, "Your mom actually told you about that?" .... No, I never fucked her but she was a bitch, too, so I didn't mind indicating that she was a whore, too, and that I'd fucked her. Needless to say, my ex went into orbit. She didn't actually believe me.... BUT.. And that's how I wanted it to be. While she was raving, I told her to relax.. that her mom was a good fuck but not anywhere NEAR as good as SHE was. She called me names I've never heard before and left. (I got a good fuck, had some fun and still had my two twenties)
Good shortie. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
I was going to give you 5* until that bullshit a**, phuqed up African mannerisms line you wrote. So I gave you 1* instead! Oh, and phuq you!
It stopped where it had to stop, which is unusual in these days of overabundant verbiage. Five pointy things for good judgement!
Patty being in real estate knew about that, as I came to find out...? No further mention of this.
I do think we should find out why she has come back and why she thinks he would take her back with 3 children.
Doesn't need much more but would be improved with a bit of a back story. Has she lost her money and is looking to fleece him? Has she run away from an abusive partner? Why is she back?
He'd already done time with his ex-wife, saw the light of reason and walked.
In stories we get spoiled, we have all the info, we are omnipresent. It can be a rush, with God like powers. In reality however we are limited with what we can figure out with limited info. This story gives us more then enough info to see what is happening. I found the silence to be golden in this story, it just allowed you to savour the story a little longer. 5 stars
Liked the revenge, the sweet Girl Friday, the light going on that his fantasies were nothing like reality and that realisation lit the way. Yes, very sweet, and deserved 5*.
A story with a man who doesn't always think with his dick. Women can only take what you give them.
Your main character is believable and likeable. Tammy is cool too and, she's right, his Ex is a skank.
With this fine little flash story being placed in Loving Wives. Signed: BTW
I think this might be your best story. I really enjoyed it. The characters were interesting. The emotions were real. And the skank was rejected. That was an excellent story! Thank you for sharing that..
This reinforces the saying, a life well lived is the best revenge. So true here!
5 stars.
seems much about nothing (maybe tossing a bone to the "progressive" leftists, but that's all)
Tammy... Watch Out!!! Think real hard before getting involved with a man gets a hard-on looking at and who went to take out an ex-wife who cheated on and skint him alive when she was married to him and, skint 2 more exes afterwards. He's not only an idiot, but a complete imbecile for even allowing her into his office.
Imbecile is not an insult for him. Just a wimpy cuckold as he joined the Long long line.
Had to quit. Can't understand any man putting up with that shit let alone going back. Unless to piss on her grave.
Wow, finally a story where the man has a back bone and does not think with his dick. She was a gold digger, thank goodness he realized it.
Almost stopped reading the story when Dan agreed to see Patty, glad that I didn't. Couldn't believe he was going to be that stupid, AGAIN! Glad he let his big head do the thinking this time.