All Comments on 'Bare Back'

Gaj

I got interested but not enough to read a novel.

Great story. Excellent writing skills. Loved the idea of the saddles. Good variety of sex scenes with wonderfully detailed descriptions. Only negative....you need to learn the difference between "to" and "too"....very distracting.

the tip was as big as her fist???as a woman I know your shootin bs and your story is crap

The story was referring to the size of a horse cock. Sounds like the woman hasn't seen a horse cock before.

She needs a lesson in Animal Husbandry.

Great story. Ive been riding since I could walk and using a dillido on a saddle since I was 16 now in my 30's

It is fiction at its best and I loved it.! Need to be some more like it on here,! Thanks.

I loved it. Good pace, great writing and a well told story. More, please.

I can't give the story top marks because the prose is flawed, contains multiple word gaffes. For example, "gate" instead of "gait", "inpatients" instead of "impatience", and many many more. You need a better editor to catch these blunders and fix them so that the continuity of the story isn't disrupted.

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I liked the eroticism of the masturbatory saddles, it made the story smokin' hot. The tale was a bit longer than I liked but the variety of sexual encounters made it tolerable. I appreciated the character development of Maggie, Jenny and Jerry as they grow through their experiences. Not a great deal of plot but that's okay in a stroke-heavy story.

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Nicely done, thank you for sharing this story with us.

incredibly well written. Awesome flow & continuity.

I cringe when self professed "experts" get in places like this & start throwing around "advice"... Alvaron... you're a putz.. Its not like the author was submitting a story for the next "2010 best erotic, short story anthology"... if they were... then the editors/proof-readers, etc would obviously be a part of the equation. its creative.. its alluring.. its memorable..... get over yourself...

AWESOME JOB... I actually had to find it again to finish it...

Rob

this was a great story. The few minor typos did not detract from the story. Great plot and imaginative.

I really enjoy many of your stories- and this is a nice addition to your public ones here on LIT. I agree with a few of the others on the "to" vs "too" typos, but the thread of the story is nice, and I like the varying sexual plotlines. This could fit under sooooo many headings. :) It feels unfinished- but as it was already 8 pages (which I don't mind!) I can see continuing in another segment later. Please keep writing!

This is rare quality. You should continue the story.

I am sory it took me so long to find your work. I think the way you write is probably the way you would tell the story aloud. To me that is the best kind.

Loved the concept, the development and the characters. Don't pay any attention to the critics: I bet they couldn't write a story like this to save their lives.

Straightflute

That was one great story! I loved every minute of it! I wish you would continue, I see many different directions it could go. AWSOME!!!!

Excellent story. Needs proofreading.

A few errors here and there, but definitely a great read. I loved it!

I live horses. I have been riding seince I could crawl! This turned me on to no end!

Excellent story, well written and sexy as hell. Loved the saddle adaptations - gotta get me one.

You left out some necessary parts. Jenny, Jerry and Mom need to learn to love fucking each other; Jerry needs a WHOLE bunch of cock and she needs to learn to love it equally well as pussy; Mary and her daughters need to learn to love to fuck Maggy and her dauthters; all six of them and Carla (who needs to learn and to love being bi) need to get very familiar with Carl's big cock and enjoy it regularly both in singular and group settings. Also, all the girls need to get a lot more strange cock and learn keeping it in the family with just Carl (if he can keep up) is better or certainly more preferable than a bunch of strange.

A very sexy twist to a well thought out story. And face it guys & gals if youre going to nit pik over some gramer or spelling errors you missed the hole point. I read it to be entertained and turned on. This strory took me down a different road. Bravo.

Well written, well paced and laced with interesting characters , hot well written sex scenes and smart dialogue! My preference leans more towards stories heavy on smart well written dialogue between characters than endless pages of narration and this gem had it big time!! Loved it! Huge fan!

Would love to hear from you!

Ray

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Love the story, love the length as weel.. sure wish you had more on this story line

This is the second story I have read of yours that could go on and on would love to see this family together and even with Mary and her daughters, Carl, and Carla. 6 on 1 with a few strap-ons, I could even see Carl being used for a change maybe after someone finds the cameras?Sooo many possibilities.

This one could use another chapter or develop it into a longer story line

Like your work

Very good story. Well developed, thought out, just the right eroticism, and the perfect length. Stop when the time is right. It was just right.

The second read. Still good!