All Comments on 'Beach Blanket Party'

Good first start. So often, first time erotic writers will jump right into the sex and provide little, if any, prelude (aka. foreplay). I think you balanced that well with the length of the story. In future stories you might want to elaborate a little more on character development. This way the reader can get a sense of all the parties involved. It doesn't have to be in-depth and sometimes no more than a brief physical description with a quirk or two added in to give the character personality.

I am looking forward to your future submissions.

I agree with the previous comment that more character development and physical descriptions would have been good. However, you write very well and are a welcome addition to the Literotica "family." Look forward to more stories from you.

I actually prefer to not give physical descriptions so that the reader can use his/her own imagination and put their own fantasy person into it.