All Comments on 'Bear Women - Anna & Daughter'

by VictorBlum

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AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
You have very poor dialog-writing skills

Poor dialog, jerky delivery, not properly edited or spell-checked, not proof-read, and so not sexy or absorbing, no stars.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
the end is missing

It ends in mid-sentence.

LegallySaneLegallySaneover 3 years ago
Sticking

the strap-on in his ass, the story went from 5* to 1*.

MaxOgdenMaxOgden8 months ago

I don't think I've ever read a story that takes a nose dive off a cliff of ecstatic, erotic heights into a cesspool that swift and abruptly.

Bravo.

The story gets a 2 for all the easily corrected errors that you were evidently ok with. Knock a star off for ass play, knock another off for male ass play and you get nothing.On second thought, the strap on in the guy's ass gets 2 stars removed so you're at a -1. A black hole swallowed all your stars.

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I've had many unique sexual experiences in my life that are incorporated into my stories.

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