by duranman
fabulous story, its getter hotter and hotter. gimme more, please!
Unless he was raised in a very strict, extremely rigid, sexually oppressive religious environment, what not take the straightforward, open seduction route rather then the Non-consent/Reluctance or BDSM avenue?
I seriously doubt two women as attractive as described would need to drug and 18YO to seduce him.
Just my $0.02 worth.
Your style is a bit rudimentary, but for a first attempt at writing, this is a very good start. Ignore the negative comments of others, its obvious that this is not supposed to be a "realistic" story (as if anything on here is). Give the guy a break, this is his story. Sexy older women COULD get who ever they want, but maybe the are looking for something specific: a hansom but emotionally under developed young man, who is a bit of a shut-in. This is a good start to what I hope will be an excellent series. My only suggestion is to make the chapters longer, and have at least something sexual happening in each chapter. Keep up the good work.
Love where it seems to be going. Keep going Duranman, you write with class
Complete mind*uck of a story. So different to most of other garbage on here, actually cant wait for next chapter. Your mind works strange though man