All Comments on 'Beautiful Mistake Ch. 02'

tell him to turn his damn phone off, it's a distraction. Thank You. Ronnie W

That was way too short. Don't take too long getting the next chapter written please!

WOW

I've read some really good stories and some really bad stories and this one is bordering on bad.

I love interracials especially black women with white men but sorry this story just isn't getting my juices running.

Oh well.

BTw when someone is in the middle of a good fuck that last thing one pays attention to is a ringing cell phone because if it's bad news it's already happened and there nothing you can do and if it's good news the caller will call back.

wish you would continue i!!!!

That was hawt! More please!

PLEASEEEEEEEEE don't leave us hanging, I couldn't get this story off my mind all day.

But where is the rest of the story? I hope that you will update soon. Thanks

Hey, nice idea for a story but you seriously need to focus and develop your story. There are serious gaps in this story. The primary male character goes to the hospital to see his sister and suddenly Shamari is there? I'm surprised that Literotica let this one thru, quite frankly.

I like the concept and the start of this story and very interested in seeing it developed and more. I notice the last update was in 06.

The story has good bones, but you are rushing it. Feed your reader the important stuff slowly (sex) let them use their imagination. Also give voice to both parties would have been nice. Right now all is read are the guy's thoughts and leave it only to him the rest of your story some may not bother reading ..

the biggest fucking tease

What's up with lil sis and her timing? She really knows how to put the breaks on sex!

Please finish

Are you toying with us, if not write a complete chapter in your case write two which will equal one. Awesome beginning.

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I’m ready for chapter 3 this is so good and I’m soaked and you can’t leave me hanging like that

So can we get 3 more chapters or a final chapter 😭