by jeanne_d_artois
OMG!!!! You are such a talented writer!!!
(It makes my blood run cold thinking what it might be like if Linda was controlling it. She doesn?t have sensible limits.?.. I think you meant Fiona in this sentence)
I loved that story!!!! Talk about revenge LOL
Very imaginative and well written, wouldn't want to get on your bad side!!!!! Wicked Laugh
nice details, and I like your happy endings.
I, too, noticed Linda where Fiona should be, but- the action was hot enough, so I wasn't sweating the small stuff...
It was good, although I felt the ending to be a bit crumpled. You spent so much time in the beginning, developing the story, but you end it so fast. I also feel like they reconcile way too fast, to the point it looks unnatural.