by mummys dirty angel
Any story told in the 2nd person is lame, lame, lame! That style is so contrived, phony and unrealistic it makes me physically ill. 2nd person stories should be banned and their authors flogged with a wet noodle until they promise never, ever to do it again.
Mmm, that story was very good, but of course you already know that! Not only did the story make me hot, but I couldn't help but notice how well written it was!!!! The way you pulled off writing the story in second person was brilliant!
Liked it a lot, very descriptive and well written. Only thing I can say bad about it is Depression or similar would be a better description of a navel than hole, but its your story and only my opinion.
EXCELLENT
HK
Again, as in my 'private' email to you, I love your grasp of feelings, passion, and of giving! I've been there, done that, and oh goodness ... I felt like I was there again only this time with you ... the author!!!!
this story was not as good as tit fuck. i read no heat in your story nor could i visualize the characters. thts story truely suck for me. it truely needs a rewrite.
Very sexy story. You write as though you have experienced this particular pleasure. Brought back some very fond memories for me too.
belly button felt honey tongue licking very super sexy in the world
The idea of giving another woman an orgasm by licking her belly button is so hot.
I like the image about 'licking the beginning of her existence.' Something I think about when navel gazing.