by Lion24655
When you switch from telling the story in the fist person to the third you need to signpost it.
The part where Barabara was having coffee with Jean was confusing as up to then it was in the first person.
When Ben had his mother it was in the third person and the first, very confusing. Why not write it all from Ben's point of view?
A hot story but you need to write it better.
The twist was surprising and so hot. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
WOW!! That says it all! What a wonderful tale of lust. Having the son's cum all over his mother. I am dripping after reading this.