All Comments on 'Best Friends Forever Ch. 01'

Great Story So Far. Please Keep It Coming.

That was a great story I think you should write more.

I loved this story and hope you continue to tell us what happened next.

really catching and not cliche... just great! lets see some more :-)

Your story is fabulous. It captures the awkwardness of taking a friendship to another level. Great when it works. keep writing.

WOW incrediblely great writting. Please continue to chapter two and three and four and other stories also.

You managed to capture the youth,innocence,and memories of days many, many years ago. I'm sure many may have had the same opportunities experienced, or wish we took advantage of, in our sexual awakening years. How we'd like to do that over again, with the knowledge we now have. This very well written story does great deed in re-activating those senses.

I hope you will write more of your memories of Holly. You seem to have a great natural talent for writing this type of tale. Thanks for sharing it.

This was awesome except for one of my pet peeves. You always need to double check word choice of spell checkers. They don't always get the right word. Condensed from Merriam-Webster's Dictionary: shuttered, Main Entry: shutter, Function: transitive verb : 1 : to close by or as if by shutters <corporations shuttering their production plants> 2 : to furnish with shutters. As opposed to: shuddered, Main Entry: shudder, Function: intransitive verb, Inflected Form(s): shuddered; shuddering : to tremble convulsively : shiver, quiver

This was a brilliant story with great detail and skillful writing

Sorry, but 5 is as high as the scale goes. It deserves more!

Good premise.

Needs more details about who was doing what to whom with the sex action.

And boy, do you need an editor/proofreader. Errors are so disconcerting.

You wrote: "....but slowly she seemed to be getting into to it." What's the "TO" after "into"?

And you wrotr BREATHE ehen you meant BREATH.

Four stars.

Such a tender, sweet, and altogether believable story, GWN. Good descriptions of two longtime friends discovering and creating their maturing feelings for each other. Among the loveliest vignettes is this one: “I put a hand behind Holly's head and softly stroked her hair. I felt such an incredible closeness and love for her.” Many of us can relate to this beautiful first-time realization. Thanks for bringing it back for me through your story.

Yep, as others have said, check more carefully for spelling and word choice. But overall I found your story well-written. Natural dialog, correct sentence structure, and good variety in your sentences. I’m looking forward to enjoying more of what you have written, and more of what you will write. Well done!

Great story

Absolutely a fantastic job