All Comments on 'Beth's Family Tree Ch. 03'

Beth's double penetration by her brothers makes me remember seeing an old Marilyn Chambers movie where she managed to take care of five men at the same time. Beth should be able to take care of Daddy and all of her brothers at the same time, don't you think? You have a fine imagination! Keep up the good work.

Overall not a bad story. But there is a problem.

I bitch at a lot of authors for this but please check for homophones, two words that sound similar but have different meanings and spellings, before you submit your story. You can just use a spell checker since these are correct spellings. For example "If she only had a forth whole." It probably should read fourth - as in the number four- not to move forward which is the meaning of the word you used. and the other one should be hole- as in a hole you put something into, not whole as in something being intact.