by Sarahsexstory
Enjoyed your story :-) If you'd like me to edit it for you (no charge!), and then resubmit it, give me a shout. You can contact me via my website at www.fenellashworth.com x
Loved this story! However, I would suggest that you use an editor. Waste is what goes in the garbage disposal. A waist is the part of a woman's anatomy that you are referring to.
Sarah, Damn, I love your writing...your ability to take me there...create the word pictures that helps my mind's eye see it happening, Chris is a very fortunate man , indeed!!!
Your story needs serious editing. It would be much more enjoyable if the errors were not there.
That is a very nice, sexy, and fun story. How about giving a shot at writing another...
One of the better stories I've read on this site. When two people like these two are as close as they are, it doesn't take much of a spark to set off a conflagration. Thanks for posting.
Awesome story. Totally into best friend stories and if it were up to me I would read (and write) them every time.
Loved it. Ignore the people that are so harsh all they want to do is talk about spelling or grammar. Congrats if it really is a true story. Enjoy each other!
This story has great potential, but the mix-ups between "your" and "you're", "waste" and "waist", "knew" and "new", in addition to the run-on sentences ruined it for me.
The element of believability was totally working for me up until the point where Sarah goes from being reluctant to even kiss Chris to begging him to put his cock in her.
I quit reading at the 7th word. Get an editor besides spellcheck.
I quit reading at the fourth "your" that should have been "you're."
This is a warm, very romantic story. If it's true as you claim - good on both of you! I'm sure your roommate got over her upset at her desecrated bedroom.
More stories, please. You have a knack for this.
I thought it made friends becoming lovers very believable and a very refreshing story. Nice instead of always just lust.
I don't know how much it matters, but this was clearly not a true story, nor was it written by a young woman.
I liked it. Oh and the guy who made the Princeton grad/spelling comment is a jackass... ignore him... :)
But apparently you have a vagina, and that's all that is required to write erotica, eh?
3 stars; I was feeling charitable.
Aside from the already mentioned typos, just about perfect. I hope it is a true story and I wish you both the best.
Really loved your story :) was just wondering if its true events (3rd year anniversary comment) or not.. I hope its true :)
Nice uplifting emotional story. Believable scenarios and characters and except for waste instead of waist, well written. I do take exception to the notion that women really do want to marry thier best friend. I believe it is a fallacy. Nice in fiction but not practical over the long term in relationships. Anyway, great story. I look forward to your next story.
It was just perfect. The pace and detail. WOW!! Sooo HOT!! I totally wish I was you.
with a hint of humour, nice work. Thanks for sharing it!