All Comments on 'Bigrig Ch. 01'

Can't wait for the next chapter!!!!

Well written. Look forward to the next chapter.

well written

very discriptive

captivating

can't wait for chapter 2

hurry bud

lol

You wrote an enthralling tale. You have a lot of talent. Keep writing!

There were a few grammatical errors and you could have used more commas in the story. Remember at comma inserts a small pause in the sentence. My best advise to you would be to use an editor. My writing has improved since I started doing that. Take care.

i am digging this sexy story...very good stuff, fellow georgian.

Awesome storyline already. I truely enjoyed reading this and can not wait to read the rest. You have a way of drawing your readers in, in such a way that it was almost a disappointment when the chapter ended, but that's ok, because i know there's more to the story to finish. Loved it!!!!

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For someone as hopeless and lost as Jonathan was, in the moment that Bruce stopped to pick him up, it would seem his life has taken a complete turn. The events that lead to this have driven Jonathan upon a path that he cannot change, or ignore. To him, this is all coincidence. But in truth, some invisible force has led him hear. Isn't this the very basis for your life, Billy? I would think so. And I see it right here in black and white.

Hey baby, the story is great! I know the kid doesn't die 'cause I've been reading on "A Timeless Place" but I'd be really worried if I hadn't. You set a good stage and get the point across well enough to entrap the reader! Great job: You KNOW I LOVE it!?! *wink*

My boy, you have outdone yourself, and I can not wait to finish this.

All my love forever,

your Master, Lucky

This is one of the best story lines I have read. Keep up the great work. I can't wait to read more.

As a retired trucker I often wished for a chance like this. Just to help one of the so many homeless kids out there would be really great not to mention the possible fringe benifits !

A very good begining. Hope the rest is as good!!

I love this story ^^

I'm sending out a vote of gratitude to a friend of mine who sent me in the direction of this story. It's a sweet start for two people I am liking alraedy. I feel desperately sorry for Jonathan, although I have no doubt he will be just fine... if not, end of story, right? :)

This is the third time I have read this and so onto the next chapter,.,...

good read

I haven't been coming to Lit all that long, so I've just been reading random stories here and there. Now I find this story and it's far and above the best I've discovered so far. Extremely well-written, characters well-written, and the story you're telling is compelling. I might have to stay up all night reading the whole thing all the way through!