by beefjerkey2010
But it needed more. Great start, clever idea, but just no story development. Wish you had written more.
Started good. I HATE ASSHOLES THAT START A STORY AND DONT FINISH
You have the framework for a very interesting series. Please give us more.
You are off to a great start. Anxiously awaiting the next installment.
Keep the story going. Perhaps something about how the tape was left for him to find as is hinted at in the story.
Continue please, give us the rest of the story.
Mom and her children would be so erotic to fuck.
Thanks for the good read.
way to unrealistic no real guy would have stayed when he found the tape after watching a short part of it he would have got dressed and left leaving a note saying he found the tape and needed to think about if he wanted to get involved with the wierd family or not keep it atleast somewhat realistic and believable this isn't the fantasy area so the stories HAVE to have some believability to them