All Comments on 'Bitch Took the Dog!'

The dog knew where it wanted to be.

didn't he just kill every witness? Including the police? You ever see Sin City? Now THAT is how you do things...LOL

Quite frankly, that's what I would have done....

I'm sorry but let me get this straight:

-She takes almost all his furniture.

-She leaves the house open for everyone to take whatever else they want

-She takes $35,0000 from him that wasn't hers before they were married.

-They are married less than 6 months.

-And the only thing he cares about is that she took the Dog when she left?

Your kidding.

Someone who works 6 days a week and tries to get head only cares about his dog?

Well that aside, the story seemed to disjointed. Except for the sex (stroke parts) it bounced all over the place. I had no idea where the story part was going to go next. Not saying it was awful, but it was disjointed. It seemed at times like it was random thoughts wrapped around a few sex acts.

Sorry

-Risq

Some people who post comments do not seem to understand what tongue in cheek humour is.

the guy would have gotten his dog. i know the author tried to make it lighthearted, but the story failed to deliver. the guy started as a loser and ends up as a loser. he never did learn. how can you leave somthing that is a sure thing? a dog will love you forever, no matter what. i guess, when his IQ dropped, it dropped permanently.

THANK YOU FOR SHARING YOUR TALENT...AND TO THE DETRACTORS MOST CONTRIBUTE NOTHING TO THIS SITE...AND PROBABLY DONT OWN A DOG...

This piece fails to reach its goal, which is pretend TV drama, in the 'fuck you' Sapranos style.

These pieces are offensive, and that includes the 'Sapranos', to anyone of Italian heritage. Leave it alone, pal. Try rewriting episodes from ER. Or better yet, don't try anything at all.

I will never understand some of you.

Now Patty was/is her real name. One click of the mouse brings up her smiling face, now wrinkled. The overly large mass of red hair is still there.

She now owns one of the largest real estate offices in her State. 3 kids by 3 different fathers, 5 times married, got them all. I got off easy compared to later husbands.

The dog is long since dead, you would need to have a dog like that to understand.

Leann passed 4 years into our marriage of cancer, the only true sunlight in my life.

My accident was just 2 years later, so now I sit and write.

I am consistantly amazed how a completely true story is crap, yet an impossible fantasy is well recieved.

But then, I guess real life IS crap. Thanks to those who enjoyed, to those who didn't get it up, keep trying. LoL

why people who don't care for something don't just move on without comment. Why would anyone waste their time commenting unless they liked something? If a story doesn't work, that's a fair comment (even in constructive detail). But, one should still be as gracious as possible and never make a personal comment about the author. Personal comments say more about the commenter than about the author.

Magmaman, thanks for your stories. I felt kinda sorry for the dog in this one (even though I'm a cat person and not a dog person).

Out of curiosity, what does the magma (lava) refer to?

Phil

Thanks for being kind. Plus I agree, why not just move on, cast a vote and be done with it? I have given low votes for poor grammer, spelling, but all stories have something to say if just to relay the fantasies living inside a person.

I have read just about every story posted here, I concede I find some folk's fantasies a bit...well, odd? But I see no reason to be angered by them.

On the name I selected, I chose magma (hot) the rest man since I am a man.

Usually, not always.

MGM

This is the worst story ever posted on this site.

Nicely done, magmaman. Good story, tight plot and believable characters. Instead of Superman in a business suit who's killed more terrorist scum that have ever existed in history while simultaneously rebuilding all of the Middle East with his magnificently hidden talents in engineering, computers and nuclear power and, by the way, banging everything on two legs that ever thought about a dick, your protagonist is just a man. He errs, feels, acts and thinks. He's real.

Thanks again. I'll check out your other stories since I found this gem.

Magmaman, I liked your story. You captured rather well the rather muddled state of mind that happens to a man when he unexpectedly gets divorced from a shark. I understand caring about the dog - been there, done that.

Muddled, wandered a bit, but entertaining and poignant. And the muddled, wandering quality was obviously on purpose: it was the narrative told by a confused, emotional, not all-that-together guy. I thought it worked very nicely.

And the people who flame you, tell you what an idiot you are or to just stop writing stories, just confuse me. What is their problem? If you don't like a story, fellas, stop reading it!!

Keep it up, MGM, we're enjoying your work!

ohio

In your story you never once said anything about getting the money back why didnt he simply goto a lawyer and have her served with papers for theft of 35,000.00 she had no right to takeing that money not for 6 months of marriage that isnt considered marriage at all she should have been arrested for insighting the fight he also should have carried a double barrell shot gun .

Had you put a small post script, stating that despite appearances to the contrary, you have learned that your story was actually about new love and trust and not about revenge or even restored justice, I would have liked the story more. As it happens, that's what I believe the story was eally all about (despite appearences to the contrary...) <P>

BTW, The questions you raised in your own comments regarding differences between the ways we assess real life events and fiction (even if based on real life experience) facts) are interesting and could be subject for many hours (or pages) of discussion. I’ll just say now that there are substantial differences in approaching the two. In fiction ALL we have is the story and we judge it for itself. <P>

In that regard I’d say that for me this story was kind of a mixed bag. I liked the voice of the narrator. I liked the descriptions of characters and places –all sounded authentic with a sense of time and place. <P>

You might guess that I had some problems with the plot. The story put forth the motive of injustice which the husband begrudges. Moving on, improves his quality of life but does not address the theft of his beloved dog and the stolen community property. My point – it’s not me who makes

A big issue out of the fact that the husband was wronged - it’s the story which builds and develops this theme almost to the end. <P>

I could not understand how hitting one brother, two new boyfriends, NOT getting back the beloved dog and not getting his money back resolves the story’s official main theme. For that matter, why didn’t he just send the divorce mail by registered mail? Regarding the stolen money, I am not a financial expert, but if the ex-wife cleaned their mutual account, then even if the husband is able to somehow get eighty checks times two hundred dollars, then both of them would still be in debt of 16 thousand dollars. How does this improve his financial standing? It does not make sense that those check books with both their names would be from a new account where she supposedly has deposited the stolen money). <P>

So, as it happens this story is not really about any revenge or righting any wrong as a big chunk of the story let us believe for most of the story. It's actuallly about restoring trust and love in new relations DESPITE not righting any wrong doing by first bitch wife, which is a whole different, much more subtle story…

obviously he's better off with the stripper, but realistically the ex wife could not legally get away with just draining the accounts like that. At least he should have told the cops he was taking his dog which obviously predated the 6 month old marriage. could have been better over all.

You should write scripts for a Situational Comedy. Seeing and illustrating the humor in human foibles is entertaining anytime, but you've done it here better than I've seen in a very, very long time.

There are also just enough semi serious scenes just beneath to show that you also have an extraordinary level of sensitivity.

Thanks ... pathos mixed with a generous helping of humor makes for an excellent read.

What,no stick?

Cops or no Cops, exgirlfriends, brothers, Assholes even the fuckin Pope wouldn't stand a chance in keeping my dogs from me Great story

FOR HEAVENS SAKE WHY NO ONE HELP MY CAPS LOCK HAVE SOME PITY FOR THE LOVE OF GOD

Seriusly. He could have slowed down and let the dog jump in and then cross the state line.

Then it would have been a happy ending all around. Even so nice short story even if it didn't end the way I would have wanted. :-)

Yhis guy is the supreme Wuss Ass leaving his dog behind. Hopefully he will be killed off in your next story. Let the stripper live though

fat cock meat, then rephilled from both ends, his mouth rephilled and his ass rephilled

never leave your dog's behind. Philthy pervert.

Good story by the way. It's called pathos, Rephil. It's not real. no dogs were left with horrible nasty women things in the writing of this story. You can stop crying now.

Stories should have a beginning middle and end a bit of plot progression and flow. This is one of the most disjointed stories I've read on this site. The only part that made any sense was the beginning 'wife left took dog and money' and the end 'wife kept dog and money' all the rest was the author's mindless sexual ramblings. The story has potential to be good might want to take another crack at it there author.

Not exactly a deep historic tome - but a fun story with a few messages -

think with the big head - good things come in small packages - don;t leave your dog behind - big ain't tough - a skank is a skank

Chuckle :-)

And gotten the dog. Possession is 9/10s of the law.

You write THE most boring stories. Start with nothing, nothing middle and nothing ending. YAWN

Fucking NEVER touch my dog or I'll make you disappear AND your entire family!

Well Told. I think that he should have pointed out to the police that the dog had bitten her brother and for its own good it should go home with him. MGM you write well and have had a fascinating life.

Thanks for sharing.

What little brains he had dribbled out the end of his dick. What a maroon.

Can't believe the faggot left his dog. Too busy drooling over the 2 guys in uniform I guess. Goes to show, just because you know karate, doesn't mean you aren't still a fucking pussy!

There is no way any respectable guy that loved his dog would have left it at that! What a waste of time reading this tripe.,

Even a spineless wimp gets the dog. Just awful writing.

'Leave the dog'?

How about NO.

Interesting that some of these old tales still get reads. But, one thing about cops.

Put up a struggle with two, they become four, then eight, all of a sudden there will be 16 of them and...you lose. You get tazed, banged up, maybe even.. shot.

Then it's jail, and guess what?

You STILL.. leave the Dog.

So, leave the Dog, they say?

You leave the Dog.

"Civil matter" They say.

I tried. I lost, way it is.

This one happened, about like that. I got into my little Nova and drove across that bridge, and I have never been back, except for the one court date.

She kept my money, too. That one I still don't get.

In several stories over the years, I have shot Patty, burned her trailer house down, left her destitute and alone, screwed her over every way possible in stories. None of THAT happened though.

She did get the Dog. Her brother? He never did heal up quite right, I get a bit of pleasure at that.

Real person, and..over 40 years later, I look at Patty's photo on Facebook.

Over 200 pounds, plus...

Still a piece of shit.

Leann? She moved on many many years ago. Fun gal, but...

No one believes these stories anyway, I don't really care. I just write what pops into my old head.

Some of it is true, or at least, based in truth.

MGM

but at least no alone. TK U MLJ LV NV

Can’t even hold on to his fucking dog? No wonder he can’t hold onto a women. Thebdog is better off with then ex.

Fuck you pig. Im taking my Dog. You can keep the Bitch!

i gave a 3 but you couldnt have described this guy any more of a wimp than you did

nuff said

What a fucking disappointment. All this build-up and he loses his fucking dog

Just in case the author hasn’t gotten the idea, from all the recent comments, that was a VERY unsatisfactory ending. In fact it wasn’t really an ending at all. It seemed more like the author just got tired of the story and quit writing. I wish I could give this story less than one star.

Did you pass out in your recliner after watching Wheel of Fortune? Is that why this didn't have an ending?

....this is my favorite comment on here by far, haha!!

(Once again, I'd like to reiterate how much this story sucks ass, though...)

No way in hell I'm leaving without my dog. Think snowball. Think hell.

Never take my dog! Put her in the ground first. She knows that.

I liked it. Yeah, you go by “traditional” standards, it’s disjointed but so what; it was a fun read, and that’s all that matters.

..he had to take the dog. A dog is for life....

All you have to do is tell the bank that the checks are not to be accepted and close your account. They aren’t certified bank checks! If they were he could still cancel them since there is no money backing those checks!

?

Than to take my siamese, had him long before her and she knew they never would have found the body. Signed: BTW

I am sorry I wasted my time on this.

She took the money. It is gone. That check crap is just that.

But cops or no cops, I'm not leaving my dog.

Not very good he lets her steal 35K and his dog and walks away.

now to change tour attitude, skedaddle home to a real life. TK U MLJ LV NV

Lost me when he didn't take Zodie!

I want the dog or my money back!

Get the dog! MC is such a fuck up.

Do it the right way. Go to Court. Get the money AND the dog and send her to jail for theft and her brother for assault. Dumbass.

Why would he leave his dog with that?

Too Confusing.

Go back at night and take the dog. Send her to jail for theft.

Part 2....he gets the dog.

I’m with the “go back and get the dog” contingent!

Bullshit … during my D, the X thought she’d get cute and make a demand for my dog … English Setter grouse dog … my travel/hunting buddy. She probably still regrets that. I’m sitting here now with 2 of his great grand pups.

You don’t leave YOUR dog!!! 2/5

that's wasted time I'll never get back. 1*

Would have grabbed the dog.

cock sucking lowlife left th dog.

no way would i leave the dog

The guy in this story is a blithering idiot. She steals $35,000 and all he can think about is the dog.

Well sure got how to write a loser down pat. I tried my best to feel sorry for the poor bastard but just couldn’t get there this time. Anyone that would be too scared to get his dog back should not own one to start with. So the dog is far better off with the ex wife