All Comments on 'Bobby and Lindsay'

Your heart was in the right place. A little work on writing and you'll really get good.

You said that they were 18 then say this started when they were 18. Which is it?

Just because they got what they wanted doesn't mean that they, she really, would give it up that easy. Just because they are "spoiled" that don't mean that they are mortally corrupt.

This should have been something that one of them had to talk the other in to.

It was too simple. It doesn't seem like much thought went into it. Sorry.

just another boring one of those type stories. You need to take the time and effort to develop the characters.

Before long, he was starting to fantasize about going over there and sucking on his sister's big titties, and this caused his cock to get hard. At that point, he decided "What the hell", and unzipped his pants, pulled out his cock, and started to slowly stroke it.

What are you on.

The obligatory cum shot: not satisfying to read, not satisfying to see, not definitely not satisfying to do.

way too short and way too rushed plus no real back ground and no end equals a crappy story like 90% of the stories here

DBRS

if more time and thought were put into it

it got me hot and bothered...

There's not enough thought and detail into this story. it's kind of boring.

What B.S. This had to start waaaay before they were 18. I'm a twin and my brother and me startede way before.

Hey, people bitch about the age thing, but they forget that Literotica won't print anything that says anybody is under 18.

Story could use a little more character development but can't blame you for the age thing.