All Comments on 'Born Into Darkness Ch. 04'

This story deserves to be finished - won't you please continue it?

Don't worry i am chapter 5 is still pending.

can we please get translations for the stuff in greek?

You need a really good editor for your entire story. I was kerfuzzled reading some of the sentences because they made absolutely no sense. Some were missing words, used the wrong tense, used the wrong word, etc. In future the word for a cut of beef is steak, not stake. A stake is a sharpened piece of wood, metal, etc. Read your story out loud to yourself and/or others so that you can monitor the flow of it and it's sentence construct. For the foreign words used, might I suggest putting the words you're going to use and their meaning above the chapter itself (but after the title). Lots of other authors have done this and it seems to work for them. If that idea doesn't appeal just put the translation to the word, sentence or phrase in parenthesis right next to it. Example: You are truly special to me principessa (princess). Good luck!

However, I find that interactions between the two characters not as realistic as I would hope.

The girl should not be so easy to just accept no answer, or short answers, to questions she has that really need lengthy explanations. The girl was almost killed and while her dream "santa claus" saved her, shouldn't she be at least a little bit worries about this and want some answers?

Also I found the scene of guy with black suit and Lamborghini a little cliche.

Just my own opinion. Like I said interesting plot and you have a good imagination :)