All Comments on 'Bound to Happen Again'

Starts off in 1st person, w/ him telling what happened then goes to the daughter's diary, which is fine but then goes to 3rd person. All in all though, not too bad. Steve

jumpy at times but very hot and wonderful imagaination.

Thank you for the valuable input. I did state at the beginning the way the story would be told. The dear diary parts are self explanatory and the other changes of voices are clearly separated so I hoped to avoid any confusion that way. I think some stories can benefit from the reader 'hearing' what the individual characters are thinking to themselves, rather than being told by third person. Given the subject of this story, I think it's one of them. It's not a technique I normally employ, but I did use it in the original and judging by feedback received then, it worked well. For the sake of continuity, I did the same for the sequel.

a very well written story. it felt so real it could have been true, Keep up the good work

Your tale is every bit as good as the other one getting all the attention. Maybe better since you don't say fudge packing like that one does. Ugh.

Great stuff - loved it!

Please, please don't go anal.

Lukas

Lol, thanks for the story :). I cant imagine it being comfortable laying on your back with your arms tied up behind you! Gotta hurt!!