All Comments on 'Breathless Ch. 02'

She fearless! I want to know what's up with Vlad's wife, Teresa, and the hold she has over her husband. I like Terence and hope we see more of him. He seems like fun. I am really enjoying this story -- it's a great read!

This is a really great story. You've put together a wonderful combination of erotic writing with good old-fashioned story telling. Sadie is sa strong yet likable character, Vladimir is a promising mystery waiting to be unraveled, and even the side characters are full of life and add much to the story.

I am loving this series and have actually read the rest of your work. it's brilliant!

Sadie is such a treat. And I'm much enjoying the other characters as well.

Off to the next chapter.

loved it!!! amazing, please keep writing!

I'm so proud over you honey (Loved it:) This is what maturity and intelligence can create out of such rather mundane subjects as vampires and wraiths.. If you ever feel the urge of mere humans though you know where to search, don't you:).. Cheers Yoron

Terrific author. You go girl!

The story is good, but the typos keep throwing me out of it.

Once again a top notch piece of fiction. Loved the subtle Jay and Silent Bob reference.

I am impressed with the originality of the world you have created. This is certainly not "Twilight for Adults" (though I wouldn't say I mind that sort of thing). A universe in which vampires, werewolves, etc. coexist in the open alongside humans seems, in my mind, a very rare or even unique thing among the various vampire lores. Keep it up.

I'm really impressed at how well written this story is! I'm loving it. You've got some real talent.

"The wraith just stared. No one came by a wraith to "say hello." It was like dropping by a dragon's cave to borrow a cup of sugar: it just wasn't done. " I laughed so hard when I read this part. XD

Hahaha was that a Jay and Silent Bob tribute when Sadie was looking at the surroundings of the BBQ restaurant? Very good story so far.

Your writing is amazing, i just came across your story and I have fallen in love with it, Sadie is amazing, she is so spunky, absolutely love her and that little sex scene in the maze, definitely the stuff of some serious self pleasuring.

but "ice cold Guiness"...That's just wrong!

Thanks for your efforts,

Jim

I just luv this story, u make some vamps seem so cool.

Luv the sense of humor and attitude. LMAO big time here.....

spend a bit more time editing and you could fix a lot of simple mistakes but great story overall. the silly typos just mess up the flow a bit

"but "ice cold Guiness"...That's just wrong!"

Ohhh, BluJ. You are so right!

Unfortunately, here on the leftish coast, all we can get is mishandled rebottled plonk. The kegs of draft Guinness we have to suffer with are often skunky and the bartenders and I'd guess most beer drinkers here abouts, can't even tell that the beer has deteriorated in shipment.

I truly miss the good old days on the Sceptered Isles, when the pub governor brewed in his basement and pulled his own pints of stout at a decent temperature.

fanfare@ Absolutely agree! However here on the left coast there are so many great craft breweries and some truly exceptional stouts... cast your eye about and revel in the local fares.

Evil Alpaca@ I'm really enjoying this yarn. Love your characters as I always do. The story sucks me in and along and I dread what I know will eventually come... the end.

It's an acquired taste I've never acquired…

You drug someone when you illegally medicate them. Drags, dragging, Dragged, are the tenses for drag, not drug! She 'drug' herself should actually be she 'dragged' herself... Honestly, it sets my teeth on edge!!

1st off, love your writing, great sense of humor and dialog. Very interesting plot and character development.

Problem, your spell checker is killing the flow of the story. Little things that just won't be caught even by a good spelling program and more than likely are CAUSED by the program. Words like "though" become "thought" or "an" becomes "and" etc. etc. etc.

Back to how much I'm enjoying the stories. Love em, keep it coming!

I didn't notice anything that seriously sidetracked me

So what a bunch of nitpickers lol

Love all your stories, great plots!!

Thanks!!!

Ed:)

You have to go to the UK to get a Guinness that doesn't taste like ass. Pretty sure they pay Irish orphans to urinate in their exports...

This is outstanding ...... So much fun to read so perfectly written and what a fabulous tale ......... Stars stars stars will rain down 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟💥💥💥💥💥💥

"To the vampire, the rules of the road were more like . . . suggestions."

On the wall of the ready room of an RAF Spitfire squadron in the Battle of Britain:

"Rules are made for the obedience of fools and the guidance of wise men."

('Reach For The Sky' by Paul Brickhill, the biography of Douglas Bader VC)

5*, thanks for sharing.

Dixon (UK)