All Comments on 'Broken Homes - Revised'

This yarn about incessant incest was maybe a bit unrealistic, but a whole lot of fun! Thanks for writing it.

good but the title is confusing how can this be a revised story if the original isn't here alsoand why didn't you add a second chapter

good but you should have stopped before he started screwing the grandkids his ok her daughters so-so the grand kids no way

I enjoyed it the second time around.

Bit choppy, but not hard to follow

Now that is an incest story!!!

just to much screwing. him screwing his sister is fine, his kid screwing her kids is fine but him screwing the daughters and grandaughters is over the top and ruins the story. you should have stopped while you were ahead.

so why didn't add two and three headed grandkids? with all the incest it is bound to happen. dlete and rewrite AGAIN and make it believable this time. keep the sex o him and his sister and his kid and hers no generational sex jumps that always truins a story.

The above title in Australian stands for completely incompetent detractors who obviously are not capable of bettering the effort.

JH-1, that was fun. !

The above title in Australian stands for completely incompetent old bastards that don't let people have their say.

This story was shit. The formatting was all wrong, the plot had more holes than a knitted top, the dialogue was pathetic at best and completely over the top. This story was typed with one hand, while the author was off his face. Show some respect to your readers and stop insulting them with this crap! Delete it immediately. Don't even try to re-write this one, it was that bad.

I could eat a Scrabble set and shit a better story than this, so head back in to the outback and inbreed if you like, just keep it away from the rest of the world, your storytelling sucks ass

Fast paced, changing tack all the time and very nicely told.

Well worth 5 stars !

Rapier875

Talk about tast pace and full of action, if you blinked you missed something.

But a very good story, I loved it !

Rapier

To summarize- guy does sister, son does cousins, they all have babies that do the whole family. Everything works out perfectly. Boring.

notice how the naysayers are all named anonymous? i'd bet they've never written anything but comments. you are a great writer i like how you keep the sax in the family without bringing in outsiders. p.s. PK lake is beautiful

Felt like I needed a scorecard!