by SteamyChik
I have to say the constant misspelling of the word massage took me back several times. Misspellings have a way of distracting. Can keep you from getting sucked into an otherwise delicious story!
I agree with the previous comments! Very well-written. Vivid and enticing! I am excited to read the next chapter! Thank you!
A very well written story. It was very descriptive and made me feel as though I was right there in the room with the two of them. I wish I could write as well as you. I look forward to reading the sequals. Thanks.
I didn't mind her passing out at all. Hell, I wish I had a man that could make me pass out just from finger fucking me. If he's that good with his fingers just think how good he'll be with his dick! Regardless of size!
I definitely wanted to read more. I liked how you made the reader feel they were there in the way you described things. I do have to agree with one comment made above, having her 'black out' was a bit of a let down, more so because the story ends right there. Too bad it didn't continue after that. I came here after reading your poem and am very happy I did. I want to read more!
well written, engaging and erotic. My only regret is the black out at the end...it never does it for me to not have the continuation of the two characters (or more). Passing out is so....victorian..lol
I think you speak from experience, my friend! Great visuals; Reminds me of "the old days" (early 60's; I had a few crushes on some of the priests that I remember from back then....hmmmmmmm....maybe it's time for confession!