by Vic5
but not a big fan of someone only being "Sister". pretty cold.
Proper spelling would be a nice touch: began to sexual shudder (sexually)
down stairs (downstairs)
Let’s be quite so we won’t wake (quiet)
she didn’t wanted (want)
girl friend (girlfriend)
day time (daytime)
sex feign (fiend)
he cum in my mouth (came)
Bill’s hide away (hideaway)
part time (parttime)
baby sitter (babysitter)
Your grammar is stilted which made it difficult to read.
By the way, it's mind -- not mine!!!
The ending was abrupt -- did you get tired of writing or did you just have to go to the bathroom?
The addition of Bill was really crappy. Made a good romance/sex storey less than good.
So natürlich und undramatisch kann eine sehr gute und kurzweilige Geschichte sein.
Would have been a great storey if you had not brought Bill into it. That made it total crap.
A few grammatical problems, but a good read otherwise.
The story would have been better if they would have left there husband and wife to run away together in the end. That would have made it not only a good fuck story but a romance also then add grammer and it would have been perfect.
I liked this one, the way it is written makes it unique.
An enjoyable story just as it is. Thanks.
What is a sex feign? Anything like a fiend? Not bad, aside from several grammatical errors.
LOve those cheating wives, and I especiaally love those cheating wives who get pregnant extramaritally without hubby's knowledge.
She would have been exen sexier to me if the first child she had was by her brother, and she was unsure if the second was by her brother or her other extramarital lover. That with, her husband being clueless would have heated up the story even more.