All Comments on 'Brother and Sister Watch TV Ch. 02'

A truly enjoyable continuation of Christine and Martys' explorations. Well written and believable. I very much look forward to further chapters in their developing relationship. Very exciting!

I found this a very believeable, well written and most of all, VERY EROTIC story!!!

Looking forward to more.

J

I enjoyed both of your submissions but had to reread sections to decipher your meaning.

I think that an editor for grammar and spelling would tighten up your work.

I look forward to another chapter.

Whilst I would love to see another instalment, perhaps with Chrissy finally letting her brother see her pussy and even let him explore it with his fingers, I must confess I'd rather they stopped short of actual penetration. It wouldn't seem in their characters. [I've just e-mailed you a few thoughts on where you might take the tale next; hope you don't mind.]

The overall flow of the story is very erotic. Looking forward to much more.

D.

the author needs to watch the grammer and typing for errors, a little more. In several locations he uses "i" when it should be "I" as the proper form.

Not a bad continuation of the story. The characters remain fun and believable and the pacing is wonderfully torturous. The large number of run-on sentences and other grammatical errors kept this one from being as enjoyable as it should be, however. Please keep writing, but don't be afraid to take more time with the editing process on the next one.

Ah, I'm a fan for sure now. Such innocence captured so beautifully - I really felt as if I were living the moment. Wonderful - and roll on chapter three.

Thanks for the pleasure.

John

Would you share the rest of the story? I would like to know if he finally went all of the way. I'm also wondering why he didn't kiss her like a man kisses a woman?A great story and well worth reading. Thanks......Rich

A little sexual exploration can go a long way. In this case, it seems it just generated a desire for more, so I'm getting ready for Chapter 3. So far, I've really enjoyed this story.

i think this story makes me really cum n hard as marty cummed at last with his sister haha,like he shoot out at his chest lol. And i love the patience of writer.. thts making the story very seducing.even for a reader n i m sure the reader whomsoever girl or a boy sure cum along as this story ends.. ok i m sure chapter 3 will going to have much more fun...so going to read it byeeee lol

The need for an editor sticks out a good bit... still a good story even if their change in relationship is rather quite too abrupt.

I remember the first time my sister jerked me off, it sprayed all over the place. One shot hit her square in the face

One of the best.

Still letting curiosity play out in slow mode.

Steadily increasing the level of intimacy.

Well written.

Remember - space after comma, it makes for easier reading. When referring to yourself capital I. Otherwise quite well written.