All Comments on 'Brother Sister Memories Pt. 01'
by siblingluzt
- 16 Comments
Anonymousabout 16 years agoCan't give a full vote as I hate continued stories! But, If you don't finish this one, I'll have to find you and string you up by your balls until they rot and fall off!
Anonymousabout 16 years agoThe buildup was slow, but well done. I hope we get down to the nitty gritty in the next installment.
Anonymousabout 16 years agoNicely written, and realistic enough. The word you want is "shuddered" or "shivered", not "shuttered"
Anonymousabout 16 years agothe story was so-so if you continue keep in mind that people do not act the way most people write in this case since he is so nervous about being near her he would probably find a way to miss the reunion or atleast most of it don't be like most of the writers here finish your story and keep it realistic and believable
oldwaynealmost 16 years agoSince you just left us hanging, I can't rate it very highly. It had potential, but maybe this just isn't your thing.
Anonymousabout 13 years agojust another lazy wannabe writer it would have been better if you never posted this at all. SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND SOME RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND FINISH WHAT YOU STARTED OR REMOVE IT
Anonymousabout 13 years agoYour story is really one that I really got into, but it is 2011 and no part 2.
You should continue and finish the (Rest Of The Story).
justcusinsover 10 years agoWhen is part 2 coming?? I'm new to this sight so I just read this story. I really hope there is a part 2,3,4.....
Anonymousover 6 years agoVery good, the pace is excellent. Btw the word is shuddering, not shuttering. You shutter the windows!
Anonymousover 3 years agoGood story so far. You need to write part 2. Here is a thought. The camping trip is at hand and They share a Jack and Jill bathroom so you can manufacture a little accident. They both over sleep and have to get ready very quickly to leave. They have talked through most of the awkwardness of their intimate evening. So, they both need a quick shower but there is only time for one. They come to the practical solution of showering quickly together. No time for hanky pankie but just enough time to get a very good eye full. Off they go to camping where they share a tent. You take it from there.
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