by pirateroberts6969
I was underwhelmed by this story. The “Romance” part of this story seemed more like a fait accompli. Just not the way I like a story to go, I like a little foreplay before getting too serious.
Numerous times you write "cloths" instead of "clothes", as one example out if many.
Also, more character development would have helped
This would have been an excellent story if you had an editor. Use "come" instead of "cum" and "through" instead of "thru." Perfect spelling and grammar focuses the reader on the story and not on the words. Good effort, keep posting! :)
Great story! but a lil feedback... find an editor, it'll be worth your wild
I liked your little love story very much, Amigo. Thank you much for your story.
I really enjoyed this story it pulled me in. Made me feel like I was one of the persons in the story.
I thoroughly enjoyed your camping trip tale. I thought it was a beautiful little romantic story.