by CTrei
This is a tricky premise to work with because it crops up a fair bit, but I think that you did nice work with it. I enjoyed the fine line you walked between consensual and non-consensual, and the ending is intriguing and makes me want to see more of where this is going. I also liked the little detail of the scent of roses - teasingly interesting.
If I would change one thing, it's that his use of "love" becomes quite overt at times and a little distracting. I'd be tempted to cut back a little. Still, it's a pleasant read.
a very nicely done piece of writing leaves the reader wanting more. i truly enjoyed it. thank you.
Very good writing. Great detail and characters. I'm thinking about a chapter 2.